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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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Note: I am not reenforcing suicide, nor am i glorifying it. I am not hurting others, nor am i hurting my self. For it is a healing poem. to vent and to let go of pain. For those who believe its the opposite, then i guess i would say "think and do what you want" Hope you enjoy the poem for what is, not what you want it to be. UNTHINKABLE The darkness that surrounds, suffocates me hurts me I know its wrong with the blade against my skin I can't control anything anymore It's too hard to live like this but it's too easy to leave I don't want to be remembered that way I want someone next to me too hold me close theres no light no shining sun just the gnarled branches of life squeezing away all that I once was the coward I am stumbles along the side walk bruised and battered the pain doesnt hurt anymore its a dull throb perhaps I need slumber I cant think with these scars on my wrists they don't help could you take them away? White againts tanned skin look into the eyes of the painting so bleak, so isolated so grim Look into my soul and see my blackness see my sins see my love see my slow fading happiness see my true colors I'm sorry for what i've done but the scars compell me to the unthinkable to let my self cry the last think i should do, should show you. Regina M.A. Levy Sunday July 1st 2001 Happy canada day, to all canadians! If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
WOW!! The sincerity in this piece along with the power really hit me. This part, "I cant think with these scars on my wrists they don't help could you take them away?" blew me away. It's so simple but the amount of emotion behind those 4 lines was amazing. The whole plead of wanting those scars to go away, those parts of your past to leave, is just, well, amazing! You rock, Regi. You really do. ~AF Never speak disrespectfully of Society. Only people who can't get into it do that. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
regina this is mind blowing. it goes to my library. this piece is just simply impowering.i always enjoy ur work. nice note at the top too. this just kicks moochs ace! *hugs* tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I really enjoyed this peice. It hit me really hard. I had the same reactions to the lines that anonymousfemale mentioned. They were so... I dont know what it was, I just really liked them. Great job! And I hope that everything turns out okay. Poetry is always a great way to vent. *Amanda* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
overwhemling powerful writing Ina...very heartfelt...and way you wrote it was awesome...i truly enjoyed this one...bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow, Regi... this poem blew me away. The power and emotion packed into every line makes this poem absolutely beautiful. This is definitely a library piece. "the coward I am stumbles along the side walk bruised and battered" Wowsers... You really poured yourself into this poem. WONDERFUL work... simply oustanding! --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"I don't want to be remembered that way I want someone next to me too hold me close" "I cant think with these scars on my wrists they don't help could you take them away?" I'm glad you feel this way Thanks for sharing Ina You are a wonderful writer keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare [This message has been edited by acire (edited 07-03-2001).] |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Ina, I love this one! I almost missed it, it was on page 2. This piece is the best i have seen from you in a while. It's hard core raw emotion. This part struck me: "It's too hard to live like this but it's too easy to leave I don't want to be remembered that way I want someone next to me too hold me close theres no light no shining sun" Really amazing work. Another for the library. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Unfiltered, unbroken, unequalled pain. I love the way you expressed yourself in this poem, if you need to, or just want to talk my email is elvenblood@spellsong.net Wonderful poem though, it flowed well except for just at the very end, but still a wonderful piece. No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was pretty edgy stuff here. I liked it because it was raw. Well done here Regi. Hope all turns out well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
wow i dunno wut to say. this one was great, and i think it's one of my favorite ones from you. blah i almost missed it too, haha i'm actually glad i have insomnia tonight for once. the lines that everybody else mentioned got to me, as well as these: "I know its wrong with the blade against my skin I can't control anything anymore" such a great poem! thanks for sharing, and i hope ur allllllright. -fear- i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
"white against tanned skin" This was my favourite line as it is a wonderful visualisation of the scars. This was a very strong poem and very well written. Keep writing!  ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
I really love this piece... I can so relate. What don't kill you can only make you stronger... |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
It's really very very good! |
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