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Angel of the World |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
*note*: this is a poem i wrote for my best friend... i gave it to her on our last day of high school (yay we're grads!) With footprints you leave in hearts and souls, Each stride is taken in confidence Your hands are stronger Your heart a little weaker Anxious for the future that waits you You've touched so many hearts, Made the world so proud And as you embark the realm of independence Hesitation will come to you Only to be challenged by thoughtful decisions Before you use to dream about flying in the sky, But now the stars chase after you Competing against your knowledge of reality Spotlight the last few years, You've grown into those feet How fulfilling they've become, Throughout these vital years Tell me angel of the world How do you get that sparkling glow, That only Heaven provides for How do you make it, That you're only noticeable as a star during a sunny day The clocks ticks away... Closer to 12 Your fancy feet hurt to dance You don't want this night to end The music stops playing And your hips stop swaying You're the only one left on the dance floor, You don't like this anymore It's been a long time This wild dance is ending Just as another day is beginning The only misunderstanding, Is that once you've passed 12, Life doesn't get any sweeter Oh, but it does Clock ticks past 12... Your wishes will come true The night will end Just ready for prince charming to sweep you off your feet "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
What a nice poem for your friend, i wish my friends would write me poems... oh wait they are all in my head... xscoutx |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was great. hope she enjoyed it. Everyone is graduating... |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was a nice tribute to your friend...great job!...i enjoyed the poem...thanks for sharing it...bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Thats a sweet and thoughtful thing to do for your friend. I'm sure she enjoyed it. I did. Keep posting.  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a VERY good poem. A beautiful tribute, to an obviously very special friend. First of all, congrats about graduating! Good luck in the future Secondly, this poem was beautiful. I would be honored to have something like this written for me. In fact, I would have probably cried, but that's just me  Every word, line, and stanza was wonderfully written, and straight from the heart. My favorite stanza was the one that began with, "Tell me angel of the world." Such beautiful words..Wonderful work. I really enjoyed this, and can't wait to read more from you. Excellently done. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Great poem! It was beautiful. I liked the effect given by noteing the time. I wrote one simialr to that a few weeks ago. I think it gives it an interesting effect. *Amanda* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Beautiful tribute to your friend. I am sure she loved it to pieces. great job here!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I've always loved reading tribute poems to people we really do care about and who obviously care for us. This is such a great poem. Thanks for sharing it and I do hope to see more in the future. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Thanks for all the replies... I never really thought I could write poems in the first place. All the replies I get makes me believe more in myself. "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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