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Jessica

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since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

0 posted 2001-06-30 02:44 AM

No matter how much you love me
No matter how much you care
You have to let go
Some things just aren't always there
Throw away your pride
Go ahead, break down and cry
Allow your heart to shatter
I promise you won't die
You have to realize
True love takes two
With out another
The emotion can't persue
Let down your heart's walls
There's one more girl to love
Not one like me
She'll hold you and not shove
Be happy for the times we had
Don't block the view
My memories will never vanish
I will always love you

I wrote this when I broke up with my boyfriend of 2 years... We shared everything together but I just felt like I couldn't continue the relationship...

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

1 posted 2001-06-30 02:59 AM

This is such an awsome poem and I toltally understand what you are saying in it.Keep up the awsome work.
lauren

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-06-30 03:29 AM

I really liked this poem. A very nice one. I liked the way you expressed yourself here. Seemed like you were, in a sense, letting him go, but at the same time telling him that you would always love him. Well that's what I got from it at least.
Anyhow, wonderful job on this one. Hope to see more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Jessica

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since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

3 posted 2001-06-30 03:41 AM

thanks for your replies!

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

4 posted 2001-06-30 04:55 AM

Unfortunately everything must come to an end. I disagree with something in your piece, though. You say true love takes two? It doesn't always. Voice of experience here and some other people in here will feel that too.
Other than that, you've expressed yourself well.

Thanks for the read.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

5 posted 2001-06-30 09:45 AM

Great work Jessica, I really enjoyed the read, well done hope to see more of your work in here

Andrew

scout
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since 2001-06-16

Posts 175
no place owns me

6 posted 2001-06-30 11:12 AM

that's really sweet, i hope you two can be friends (people say exes can't be friends, but that's a lie). me and my ex are friends (we went out with each other without knowing each other), although it took us 3 years to talk to each other again (most of it had to do with moving etc.) but now, i don't want to be her boyfriend, i just want to be her best friend. Oh well, that's what I'm thinking of.

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

7 posted 2001-06-30 06:30 PM

I liked this alot Jessica.
Very well written.
The whole message of the poem was good.
Though I do agree with AF- It doens't take 2 people to have true love.
Great write!
Keep posting.

Angel Bee
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since 2001-01-30

Posts 176
Virginia

8 posted 2001-06-30 06:40 PM

Nice poem, keep writing. ab

*~"Sometimes I wish I was a little girl again--because bruised knees heal faster than broken hearts."~*

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

9 posted 2001-06-30 10:09 PM

I see what you're saying here, but along with EJ I disagree with what you said about love taking two. You did a nice job with this poem... it's filled with emotion. I really hope that y'all are still friends. It takes a lot to continue to stay that way after a relationship like that, but I hope everything worked out

Nice job here.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

[This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 06-30-2001).]

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

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10 posted 2001-07-01 02:57 AM

awesome message in a emotional poem...i liked it lots...great job!...bye

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-01-2001).]

Jessica

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since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

11 posted 2001-07-01 10:45 PM

I understand what everyone meant by not thinking "true love takes two"... when I was writting this I was referring to a stable relationship. I know you can love someone very dearly even when they don't love you... But thanks!!!

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

12 posted 2001-07-01 11:24 PM

This is a very emotional poem Jessica
I guess you gotta do what you gotta do
I hope to see more of your work
I'm impressed already, so keep sharing
Thanks for the read

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

13 posted 2001-07-02 02:31 AM

the title makes me think of that whiney houston song.

i like the poem, however i suggest you change the wording of the title, even just tweak it a bit.

i don't think anyone likes that song. heh.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

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14 posted 2001-07-02 03:11 PM

It also reminded me of that song by Whitney Houston. I enjoyed this piece, especially the lines
"True love takes two
With out another
The emotion can't persue"
I agree. You can love someone, but I think true love exists only when the love is mutual. But everyone has their opinion. Great job!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

15 posted 2001-07-02 06:40 PM

this is a wonderfully written poem. thanks for the great read!

*Justine*

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

16 posted 2001-07-03 01:35 AM

Oh wow. Very excellent write here, Jessica. I'm VERY impressed! Keep it up!

Rhonda

"Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here*

little_krazy_poet
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since 2001-05-28

Posts 41

17 posted 2001-07-03 02:07 AM

i really liked this poem. i can relate to your ex in this one beause the same thing hapened to me. well keep writting hope to see more

WRITE WHAT YOU FEEL!! AND DON’T LET ANYONE TELL YOU TO DO OTHERWISE

WHEN YOU LIVE, YOU DIE
WHEN YOU DIE, YOUR FORGOTTEN
AND WHEN YOUR FORGOTTEN

DancinQueen

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since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

18 posted 2001-07-04 05:13 PM

great poem..i especially liked the last 3 lines. difficult subject, said very well. keep posting

*dq

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