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n e where
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since 2001-05-30

Posts 32
Australia

0 posted 2001-06-29 10:35 PM

This was a real quick poem I wrote the other day nothing special

I miss love
In all its glorys
The leaves fall outside my window
And around the feet of the lovers as they
Meander their way through central park
I wonder if everything for them
Is at perfect as it seems
I draw a heart in the fog
That has come to block my view
And wonder what a childish thing to do
For such a mature soul
Many a time I have held a bruised heart
And often badly mended it

But I still miss love.

~I'd rather see the world from another angle~ Jewel.

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

1 posted 2001-06-29 10:42 PM

Being burnt is never good but you have described your feelings very well. The lines,
"The leaves fall outside my window
And around the feet of the lovers as they
Meander their way through central park"
are very well thought out. You've done a good job with this one.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-06-30 01:41 AM

Who wouldn't miss love. It's the best feeling ever. Once you've had it...you feel empty without it. You did a great job portraying your feelings. Keep posting. I enjoyed the read.

~Jessica

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-06-30 02:40 AM

Love is something so powerful that not having it drives many to their demise. I enjoyed this poem very much. It's written with a lot of truth. Stay strong, and be healthy. Good luck.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

4 posted 2001-06-30 03:03 AM

I think you should take pride in every poem you write

You never know... it could be the best one you ever compose. I really liked your poem though... Awesome!

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

5 posted 2001-06-30 03:55 AM

Great poem I love it and I think everyone misses love when they lose it.Keep up the awsome work.
Lauren

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

6 posted 2001-06-30 09:14 AM

I agree with all the others. I think love is powerful and wonderful when it is true. I'm sorry you're missing it. Great poem, very pretty.

"Woah my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch a long, lonely time"- Unchained Melody

scout
Member

since 2001-06-16

Posts 175
no place owns me

7 posted 2001-06-30 11:00 AM

i like this, i too miss love, but i often wonder if i really experienced love. oh well...

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

8 posted 2001-06-30 07:32 PM

This is amazing. I reead and re-read this poem over and over. What an excellently written piece of work! Definitely one for the library. I know exactly how the feelings that are portrayed hurt. I can connect with this poem so well... I loved the lines: "I wonder if life for them/is as perfect as it seems." WONDERFUL work. Simply oustanding..

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

9 posted 2001-07-01 02:51 AM

*sigh*...this hit home for me...this is how i feel...awesome poem...you written it very well...i felt the emotions in my heart

...hope to see more...bye..

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

10 posted 2001-07-01 02:51 AM

*sigh*...this hit home for me...this is how i feel...awesome poem...you written it very well...i felt the emotions in my heart

...hope to see more...bye..

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

11 posted 2001-07-02 09:32 AM

*applauds*
This is such a beautiful piece
You deserve every praise that you get
beautiful work
*applauds*

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

12 posted 2001-07-15 12:20 PM

This was beautifully written...bening hurt sux and i think everyone klnows that but you describe it in words so well...good job hun keep up the good work

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