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Hallucination
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0 posted 2001-06-29 01:04 PM


Don’t lie,
Oh no don’t lie.
Don’t erase,
Oh no don’t erase.
Don’t cry,
Oh no don’t cry.
Don’t speak,
Oh no don’t speak.
But just listen to me,
when I say

Don’t cry, don’t be so sad,
You’re prettier than that.
Don’t cry, don’t be so shy,
You’ve got no reasons to lie.
Don’t cry, don’t cry

Don’t fade,
Oh no don’t fade.
Don’t close,
Oh no don’t close
But just listen to me,
When I say.

Don’t cry, don’t be so sad,
You’re prettier than that.
Don’t cry, don’t be so shy,
You’ve got no reasons to lie.
Don’t cry, don’t cry.

You always shine so bright
But I guess you don’t see it.
You’re beautiful as the night
But I guess you don’t believe it.
Dry your eyes, and listen to me,
When I say.

Don’t cry, don’t be so sad,
You’re prettier than that.
Don’t cry, don’t be so shy,
You’ve got no reasons to lie.
Don’t cry, don’t cry.


© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
TopGunLauren
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1 posted 2001-06-29 01:55 PM


This poem is really good and I really love it.Keep up the grea work.
  Lauren

Heavens Tears
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2 posted 2001-06-29 03:03 PM


Aww.  That was sweet.  Great job!  I would like to know who exactly you are talking to in this.

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Spice
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3 posted 2001-06-29 04:59 PM


Ya know- I never understood why my mom told me I was "Too Pretty to cry." HaHa... ANYWAY

I liked the poem. It was sweet.
Keep posting.  

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4 posted 2001-06-29 09:54 PM


I didn't much like the style of this one. Not my favorite by you, but the message of it was nice.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away
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5 posted 2001-06-29 10:20 PM


I'm guessing this is a song.. Correct me if I'm wrong.  This is a very different, unique style from what I've normally seen from you.  I didn't like it as much as the other work, but I still enjoyed this nonetheless.  Nice work.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

IsGona
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6 posted 2001-06-29 10:28 PM


Yeah I'm with Fading Away.  As a poem I'm with dopey , but I think this could make a great song.  Very nice thoughts here.  Good work
Jason

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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN'
<i>~Hatebreed~</i>

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7 posted 2001-07-01 02:43 AM


sweet...the message is indeed nice...good job on the poem ...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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8 posted 2001-07-01 11:03 PM


This had a song effect on me.  Beautiful write my friend.  keep it up.  hope to see more

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