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scout
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since 2001-06-16

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no place owns me

0 posted 2001-06-29 12:46 PM

(por Ceniza, por sin no busco el Padre)

through tinted glass
the sun shines a certain shade of green
that my desolate eyes has yet to see
since age has taken me
sometime ago (so long you know?)
remember the waterfront
shining a star as God gently lift it up
shining the sun so strong and vibrant
through the tinted wax of our eyes
that was apparently applied by the grace of God
to shine the sun a shade of green

[May 26, 2001]

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

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scout
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since 2001-06-16

Posts 175
no place owns me

1 posted 2001-06-29 12:47 PM

so my spanish is rusty, i haven't used it in so long...

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
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2 posted 2001-06-29 01:34 PM

good stuff scout what is that a picture of? lol I know it's a little boy but is it you or just a random pic?

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

scout
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3 posted 2001-06-29 02:00 PM

it was me, when i was younger, much much younger

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

Dr. Jo-Bizz
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since 2001-06-06

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4 posted 2001-06-29 02:39 PM

hee hee. that was scout last year. haha. j/k scott. i love this poem. very good. green is a rad color you know. you knew that. right. have a great day.

dr. jo-bizz

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

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5 posted 2001-06-29 03:27 PM

Nice title. For some reason I expected it to be a funny poem. But I guess you cant judge a poem by its title huh? Great job!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

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San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-06-29 09:50 PM

Very well done here. I really liked this poem. You are truly a wonderful poet. I loved the ending. The sun with a shade of green, wow I like the imagery of that one. I enjoyed this poem a lot. Keep posting!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-06-29 10:17 PM

The imagery in this whole piece is amazing.. The way you described the sun was awesome. Wowsers.. very well done, Scott. I really enjoyed this one.
Oh, and I love your picture. Very original.. and cute

Hope to see more soon!

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

IsGona
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since 2000-07-14

Posts 723

8 posted 2001-06-29 10:25 PM

This is amasing scout... truely.
It's been a while sinse I visited this place and this is the first poem I read when I got here. What a treat. Thanks for sharing

'Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN'
<i>~Hatebreed~</i>

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

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9 posted 2001-06-29 10:57 PM

muy buen hecho! continua a buscar el Padre y espero que continuabas a escribir para nosotros! (yeah i think my espanol gets the rusty award of the day...

)

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

scout
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Posts 175
no place owns me

10 posted 2001-06-30 10:38 AM

well i understood what you said obscurity, so it can't be that bad... i just don't remember the grammar!

I'm sorry about the misleading title, i just didn't know what to title it, and so i just titled it where I was. what's also neat was that it follows a little pattern... the first letters of each line goes ttt ss r ss ttt, just that was something interesting to point out, i don't know why i did that. Anyways thanks for your replies, i really appreciate it. I hope we all can see a Green Sun.

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

anonymous albert ?

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11 posted 2001-07-01 02:45 AM

uh..im still stuck on the "spanish" part..

...well..tell me what it means later..ok?

...and the poem was nice

...great job!...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

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Fl

12 posted 2001-07-01 08:03 AM

Great poem... EVEN rustier in Spanish...lol it's not very good AT ALL...! But I did like your poem. You're a great writer.

Jenn

scout
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13 posted 2001-07-01 11:34 AM

Geez, you stop speaking spanish for 4 years and this will happen to you, I just never had anyone to talk to in spanish in so long! I was going to ask someone, but then I thought well, people will get the idea...

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

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Twilight Zone

14 posted 2001-07-02 09:44 AM

This is a good write Scout.
Your works have been very impressive
keep it up and keep sharing
thanks for the read

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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