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mistic
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0 posted 2001-06-29 12:42 PM


First you stole my heart, locking it in you,
Openingmy blank pages to write your soul there
Reaching out to comfort me, never to let me fall.
Every kiss you give, every sweet touch -
Very pleasing will they always be.
Every second we're together is
Realized it'll all be better once it's
           forever.

This is dedicated to my fiance whom I'll hopefully be spending forever with.

© Copyright 2001 Stephanie Harmon - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-29 01:50 PM


what a deep poem I love it keep up the awsome work!
  Lauren

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2 posted 2001-06-29 03:05 PM


That was a great poem.  You obviously care a lot about this person (DUH!)  Why else would you marry him!!  

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

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3 posted 2001-06-29 04:56 PM


"Openingmy blank pages to write your soul there"

This was really sweet, Mistic. Best wishes to you and your fiance.  

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4 posted 2001-06-29 05:06 PM


hmmmmm... how very sweet of you angel.   now, if I only could get AHOLD of you today...  

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.


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5 posted 2001-06-29 10:06 PM


Well done here. This was exceptionally sweet. I ABSOLUTELY loved the line about writing the soul on the blank page. That was awesome. Hope to see more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-06-29 10:27 PM


You're very lucky to have this person in you're life.  Cherish what you have  
I really enjoyed this poem.  I LOVED the first two lines about writing his soul on your blank pages... wow!  Amazing work.  Nice job, Stephanie!  Hope to see more soon.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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7 posted 2001-06-29 10:30 PM


What a lovely poem.  
Very nicely written and what's even better is that it is actually written for someone you care very much about.

"Every second we're together is
Realized it'll all be better once it's
           forever."
^^ Fave lines.  

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

mistic
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8 posted 2001-06-30 11:31 AM


thanks for replying everyone   I just wanted to let everyone know that it also says forever going down the side with the first letter of each line, since no one seemed to notice that, not even my fiance when i gave it to him. oh well i guess
DragonFang
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9 posted 2001-06-30 05:00 PM


Did so! Just didn't realize I did till you pointed it out to me  

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.


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10 posted 2001-07-01 02:49 AM


wow...i loved how you worte the imagery with full of emotions ...great poem...and its a great tribute...enjoyed greatly...hope to see more!...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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11 posted 2001-07-01 11:11 PM


That is a very beautiful poem written for someone you love.  Good for you girl.  I wish you all the happiness  

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12 posted 2001-07-15 12:15 PM


COngrats on your engagement hun!! this was a very sweet and romantic poem...give this to him! Good job i liked it  
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13 posted 2001-07-16 01:26 PM


GREAT PoEm!!!! I liked this a lot. I always try to read everyone that you have posted, because I love them all. good job.

Shoot for the moon cause if you miss you'll still end up in the *stars*!!!

Don't tell me that you love me unless you mean it, Beacuse I might do so

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