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Words_of_Glitter
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0 posted 2001-06-29 10:48 AM


You cannot do this to me again
Can't let you turn me inside out
Now you think you're ready to show me
What your love is all about?
Well, I think you're just confused
Not going to let you waste my time
Not going to play with my emotions
And I'm not going to change my mind
I know I should be so happy
This is what I have waited so long to hear
Maybe it was your heart talking
Or maybe it was the beer
You've got a girlfriend, remember?
I don't think that you remembered very well last night
You pretend that dating me has been the highlight of your life
Then why did you let me go?
Took you eight months to realize what you had?
Figure out that it was really me
That you wanted so bad
Eight months is a lot of time
And I got a lot of thinking done
I learned not to let you crawl back on your time
Because this really isn't love
What you have with your girl is special
Not a lot of people are loved like that
So you can turn around and walk away
Because I'm not going to take you back

"Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without."

© Copyright 2001 Sarah Morehouse - All Rights Reserved
anonymousfemale
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1 posted 2001-06-29 11:11 AM


Booya! Take a stand!
I really like the way you emphasised the word girlfriend in italics. It made it stand out and say yeah, girlfriend, take notice of it.

Well done on a great piece, Sarah.  

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

TunaKaHuna
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2 posted 2001-06-29 11:12 AM


Alright! What a way not let yourself down about through how others can change your life;and really make you think! It takes a lot of courage to say what you mean to a person who just needs to realize how important life must mean to you. Your poem shows what poeple always seem to hide from themselves, the courage to stand up to something that may or may not be right. Nice form. Keep standing strong...

--Brenton

If you give a person a title, then you really dont have to know a person...but, they may just be the person who can make you see of happy life can be.

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3 posted 2001-06-29 11:58 AM


This was great.  I agree with all ^ there.  It had great flow and a really good message.  

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

TopGunLauren
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4 posted 2001-06-29 01:54 PM


Your poem has a really greta message and you should always stand your ground.Never let other people influence you or change who you are.Keep up the awsome work!
  Lauren

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5 posted 2001-06-29 03:34 PM


Very nice work!!  That's right... stand tall, and show him what you're all about.  I really liked the first few lines where you say you can't let him turn you inside out again.  You don't want to go through that again.  You poured yourself into this poem, and that always makes great poetry.  I love it when a lot of emotion is put into work like this.  Very nice message.  I really enjoyed this... Wonderful job!

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

Spice
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6 posted 2001-06-29 04:50 PM


Wonderful!  

I absolutely loved this one. I wish more people would take a stand for themselves. This was a GREAT write. I'll be looking for your next one.   Keep 'em coming.

Jenn Cirrincione
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7 posted 2001-06-29 09:05 PM


Oh yeah!!! Have you lived my life girlie...?
This was sooooo strong. Kudos to you. Keep writing.

Jenn

"Woah my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch a long, lonely time"- Unchained Melody

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8 posted 2001-06-29 10:02 PM


I liked this one. Shows the strength of your personality. Keep strong, and well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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9 posted 2001-07-01 02:40 AM


i liked it...stand up for sure ...great job!...bye Sarah

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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10 posted 2001-07-01 11:09 PM


one thing....You Go Girl  

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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