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Ina
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since 2000-10-09
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Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-06-28 06:12 PM


A LOVER'S BLISS


Ancient emotions
ignite flames of
the lovers cores
have their hands
been upon anothers
hips?
Gazing into each
others eyes searching
for love
already knowing
the lusty feelings
it's time for love
Clothed in the purest white
yet enticing
his blue eyes devour
her body
In this state of nothingness
all that once was
is now vanished within
her deep passion
bouncy lovers
pass their lives
to each other
rendering complete trust
at the cavern's mouth
is where they proove
their love
already loyalty of soul
Perhaps in  this world
of mine out in the sun
the world seems so alive
although in their hearts
they know the fate to come
certain darkness
invades a cloudless day
chance, luck, romance
the perfect picture
of serenity!
The calm exterior proves
to be a far greater mask
than indifference
one,two, three
BOOM!
The lovers reach their
final destination
the final kiss
the last embrace
the finalee of their
intimacy.

Regina

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

© Copyright 2001 Regina Levy - All Rights Reserved
cherish
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since 2001-03-25
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swimming in fairy floss...........
1 posted 2001-06-28 08:00 PM


The lovers reach their
                               final destination
wow ....this is great! i enjoyed the reading of it quite a bit! you did very well on this one regi...thanks for sharing..

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2 posted 2001-06-28 09:04 PM


This is very good, Regi.  The ending was very powerful.. My favorite lines were :it's time for love/Clothed in the purest white/yet enticing.  The way you said love was clothed in the purest white was awesome.  nice work!  You're a talented poet.. I hope to read more soon.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

TopGunLauren
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3 posted 2001-06-28 10:12 PM


This is a great poem keep up the awsome work!
Lauren

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4 posted 2001-06-29 12:39 PM


powerful...great poem...well done!...bye Ina.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

obscurity of cloud
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5 posted 2001-06-29 03:13 AM


Tres bien fait, Regina.  This has a very classic poetic sense to it.  I hope to read more!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

anonymousfemale
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Limbo
6 posted 2001-06-29 08:28 AM


Ina, your free verse is just amazing. Someone said to me a while ago that you are the Queen of freeverse and yes, you deserve that title.  

Your last few lines were fantastic. Once again you have given us a poem that exceeds all expectations.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

the_rescue
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Japan
7 posted 2001-06-29 09:13 AM


once again good stuff I liked it a lot I really like the way you right it's a lot different than most peoples style and it rocks

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

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with you
8 posted 2001-06-29 09:25 AM


cool...good free flowing verse  
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9 posted 2001-06-29 04:06 PM


Not your best Regi, but nonetheless a good poem by you. I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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10 posted 2001-06-30 11:59 PM


I love this poem Ina
I just simply love it
~*applauds*~
you have become outstanding poet
keep it up

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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