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angel_2401
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0 posted 2001-06-26 12:24 PM

Sitting in the night
I look at the heavens above
Through the clouds shine no stars
But that cheshire cat smile of a moon

I walk around that still pool
And see shadows, not reflections
I do not see myself
Thinking of you

Though the short time that I've known you
I've seen your many sides
But I did not realize
You do not know Him

You do not know He made the night
The clouds that hide the stars
The still water of the pool
All they are to you are

Shadows of the night

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I wrote this for a dear friend of mine, who does not know Him. I am hoping one day he will see Him.

Kristin

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

I'm a nobody, nobody is perfect, therefore I'm perfect.

keoni
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Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-06-26 01:35 PM

I enjoyed this alot. This was so descriptive and so cool. It was very good. I hope your friend can find Him soon cause He is awesome.
Jon

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"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

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2 posted 2001-06-26 09:35 PM

This is very good. The message is great... I'll pray for your friend to someday realize the great gift He's given us. The imagery in this piece is awesome. Reading through gave a great picture in my mind... very vivid. And the use of the line break before the last line, "Shadows of the night" was very conveniently placed... That added drama gave it a neat effect. Nice work. I enjoyed this bunches!
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You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

obscurity of cloud
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3 posted 2001-06-26 09:40 PM

great imagery and overall style!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

SEA

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Member Seraphic

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with you

4 posted 2001-06-26 10:50 PM

this is good writing

FoxXena
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where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted

5 posted 2001-06-26 10:54 PM

I hope your friend does get to know Him because He is a Great Father and He loves unconditionally.

~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~
~*~I say it is the written word.~*~

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6 posted 2001-06-27 02:20 AM

I enjoyed this one a lot! Very well written!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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since 2001-04-21

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7 posted 2001-06-27 02:10 PM

i liked this a lot. good job

one morning you wake up afraid you are going to live

the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

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8 posted 2001-06-27 02:17 PM

the author and finisher of his life yeah I hope he finds Him too the poem was good kinda a different way of putting it but I liked it.

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stace_co2003
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In a dream world

9 posted 2001-06-27 02:26 PM

awww, sis...I know..I've been praying for him too..just keep praying that he'll find the way

-->Don't frown. You never know who is falling in love with your smile.
-->Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

Heavens Tears

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10 posted 2001-06-27 03:29 PM

Wonderful poem! I too hope that one day your friend will see Him, but until then, just pray for him or her. Thanks for the read!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Acies

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11 posted 2001-06-27 07:17 PM

I like the symbolism to this, and the same time I do see exactly what you mean cause I do know what it's for. Beautiful write Kristin. ~*applauds*~
Just don't persecute others for their choices in beliefs

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12 posted 2001-06-28 12:07 PM

beautiful job!...the imagery you used were soo vivid

...i enjoyed the symbolism as well a LOT...great job on the poem...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

fractal007
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13 posted 2001-06-28 01:49 PM

Quite an impressive poem! I am glad you've mixed such a wonderful theological truth in with a dark poem like this. Congradulations on a great idea and a great poem.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

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scout
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14 posted 2001-06-28 02:01 PM

I was a strong nihilist and i found Him (so there is hope), it was totally by accident though, He's a sly one i tell you.

xscoutx
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angel_2401
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since 2001-06-12

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Cincinnati, OH

15 posted 2001-06-28 02:20 PM

Thanx for all the replies you guys, I appreciate it!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

I'm a nobody, nobody is perfect, therefore I'm perfect.

Acies

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16 posted 2001-06-28 06:55 PM

You're welcome Kris

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14

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Selah, WA, USA

17 posted 2001-06-29 12:32 PM

Very good poem. I totally agree... It all is just shadows of the night without Him. Great message, and very well written. Keep it up!

- Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

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Spice
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18 posted 2001-06-29 01:15 AM

Great message Kristen.
Well done!

anonymousfemale
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Limbo

19 posted 2001-06-29 07:56 AM

I really don't like this Kristen. Not everyone has to know "Him".

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

angel_2401
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since 2001-06-12

Posts 131
Cincinnati, OH

20 posted 2001-06-29 04:50 PM

Ok, here, I did not write this poem because I think that everyone has to know Him. I don't think a good Christian should try to impose their beliefs on others. I don't try to make people see my beliefs. I respect others beliefs. I wrote it because I was showing how people who don't believe might view it. I wrote it for him, and showed it to him, showed him my feelings about it. The guy I wrote it for is a dear friend of mine, and I wanted him to know how I felt. We are still good friends, and he never took any offense to the poem. If anyone took any offense to the poem, I am very sorry, I was only expressing my feelings for my friend.

Kristin

[This message has been edited by angel_2401 (edited 06-29-2001).]

Acies

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Twilight Zone

21 posted 2001-06-30 01:27 PM

good for you

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

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In a dream world

22 posted 2001-07-02 03:24 AM

*~*Bump*~*

-->Don't frown. You never know who is falling in love with your smile.
-->Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

fearing-laughter
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land of cheese (Wisconsin)

23 posted 2001-07-06 04:26 AM

hey this was a cool poem, and i hope ur friend is okay. i agree with elizabeth that everyone doesn't have to know him, but maybe someday i will be able to believe as strongly as some people. thanks for the read.
-fear-

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