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WHiTePoNY Junior Member
since 2001-06-17
Posts 13South London. UK |
WHEN IM FEELING BLUE, I CLOSE MY EYES - THINK OF YOU. WHEN YOU'RE LYING NEXT TO ME, ME BESIDE, YOU BESIDE, NOWHERE ELSE I'LL BE BESIDES. TIME IS OFTEN CRUEL, BUT I KNOW. "Push back the square |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
"i like to watch you sleep at night, to hear u breathe, by my side, and although sleep leaves me behind there's nowhere i'd rather be." i think this is totally your best poem yet.. you're an angel. laura -x- The road ahead is as long as you make it. Make it worth the trip ~*~jon bon jovi~*~ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I loved the line about time being cruel. Very, very true. I enjoyed this. Nice work! One thing... maybe next time, you might not want to use all caps. It tends to be a little distracting. Nice work, though! Keep sharing your work with us  --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yea the time cruel line is true a lot. I thought you wrote this well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great read WP, I really enjoyed this and "Time is cruel" line. Keep on sharing Andrew "Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
aww look ^ isn't he cute? hehe, but like I love this poem..and this is the first I've read from you. keep writing!! btw, what is duff? -->Don't frown. You never know who is falling in love with your smile. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
true and...i enjoyed the way you expressed yourself...the poem was short but powerful to a sense...bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
great work, but the caps lock makes it kind of hard for me to fully appreciate the meaning. keep posting! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Time is a very annoying feature of life but we all get through it. Nice poem. ~AF~ Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It always feels good to imagine/dream. I believe it's what keep us sane thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This is the first of your poetry I recall reading, and it is very nice. Keep posting here. *Amanda* |
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Maynard Junior Member
since 2001-06-29
Posts 12IL |
nice job, WHITE PONY, and your quote is tight, the DEFTONES rule "I have nothing to tell you or sell you for the moment... but thank you for asking." |
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