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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
Sometimes she writes poems that are so simple (no where near profound) Never writing something worth the effort that could make her feel proud Sing-songy lines scribbled down that easily make sense Keeps writing meaningless drafts until her collection is immense Sometimes she writes a poem and then posts it on the Net For a bunch of fifth-graders to read (see how many replies she gets) She can't do this anymore She can't suject her work to the scrutiny of pre-teens Always being polite, never saying anything mean She can't write in an environment where she cannot grow But right now, it's where she'll stay She has no where else to go "Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without." |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
if you aren't happy here...go post in Open  I liked this |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
this is good! but wait...I'm a junior in high school..not quite a fifth grader, but I get what you are saying...maybe I should move to some of the other forums too...hm... I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Now you got me thinking...hehe. Anyways... It's true. If you're not happy here (GO FIFTH GRADERS! ok...no.) do whatever you can to make yourself happy. -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
No, that really isn't what I meant! I promise! I'm sorry! I feel bad! It wasn't even about me!!!!!!!!!!! UGH!!!!!! I am a terrible person! "Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without." |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
hey, this is good because it's different! you've done a great job with the alliteration and theme, but if you were really going for rhyme, you might need a class from Allan...he knows what he's doing great poem though! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I like this. It's different... Good work. I enjoyed the read. Keep posting all your work. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
good stuff good stuff |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this one. Very nicely said here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I was gonna say something that I'm afraid might sound mean, but I'm glad I saw your reply back. If she cannot grow in a certain enviroment, she should go try other places. It doesn't make any sense to stay. Thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
If you really want I can be nasty but this place spares the feelings of others. Your work is very good and I see no need for pulling it apart. Your piece spoke of things that many people I'm sure feel in here. Good luck with your future writing. ~AF~ Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liekd it...differnet but well told...bye..  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
I feel old if everyone's a fifth grader. 1/3 of a year left of my teenage. xscoutx |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I dont know anyone here whos a fifth grader, so I am glad that you cleared that up. Ya had be kinda confused there. Great poem though! *Amanda* |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I liked this. It's different. Very nicely put.  |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey hey...hmmm yeah if u are sick of teens go to a different forum, that's wut's kool about PIP is that it has somethin for everybody. good poem, haha u had me laughing. i consider myself a pre schooler at heart, even if i am 14. thanks for sharin. -fear- i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
This was an excellent post you expressed your feelings well and it made up a strong piece. You did very well to place it in the format of a poem. By the way, I am from England and at what age if fifth grade?! I am 16 what grade would I be in?! Keep writing!!  ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
Oh my gosh, this is the lamest poem I have ever written and it is getting the most replies ever! How lame is that! LoL. ANyways Kim, fifth grade is about 11 years old and you, being 16, would most likely be a sophomore in high school. Thanks everyone for reading. You all are great! "Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Kim, a sophmore in high school is a 10th grader. You would either be in 10th grade or 11th grade. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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