Teen Poetry #5 |
The Path Of Love |
LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
“The Path Of Love” Journy of a lifetime From birth till death A game of the senses played Upon the cords of our hearts Perplexed In a riddle Amazed In a daze Searching In a quest Love In a tenderness Winning In a triumph Losing In a fall Emptiness In a void Pain In a heartache Lonely In a separation Death In the end It has come and gone This thing known as love It makes us in the beginging But it will break us in the end |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very good! I like this one a lot |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Yay! Another good one from you! Rhonda "Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here* |
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FoxXena Member
since 2001-06-13
Posts 141where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted |
There are sometimes when that it too true. ~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"This thing known as love It makes us in the beginging But it will break us in the end" I cannot express how true this really is. I'm convinced now that love only ends in heartache. Nice job. I really enjoyed this. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I loved the format on this one! Great post. Wonderful read! You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Lone Wolf- wow! this is a powerful write!! i really like this! smiles, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
powerful yet full of truth...i liked this one aLOT...great job!...enjoyed greatly ...bye im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
i agree with marie...that stanza was awesome. great work lone wolf. -fear- "I know the pieces fit cause i watched them fall away"--TooL |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work Lonewolf this was awesome and I thourghily enjoyed the read Andrew |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
i told you again one morning you wake up afraid you are going to live |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
LOL, yah i guess you did. And thank you all for your replies It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I don't believe that Love is what breaks us in the end. It's mostly the other person's lies and disrespec that causes it. Be strong my friend. Keep your chin up hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
this is great...really great! thanks for sharin!!!!!! I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
I liked the way you did the middle of the poem...with just two lines. I found it effective. This is extremely well written! Keep it up! -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Thank you for your replies It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really love how you wrote this poem. Very powerful! I thought this was pretty darn good, in fact. Impressed the heck out of me. VERY nice. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
"This thing known as love It makes us in the beginging But it will break us in the end" i loved that part. but i agree with acire. i know it can hurt, but it heals. *hugs all* tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
awesome! the format was unique, i dig that. its great to read poems that dont have the "norm" format. keep posting *dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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