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LoneWolf
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0 posted 2001-06-24 07:19 PM


“The Path Of Love”

Journy of a lifetime
From birth till death
A game of the senses played
Upon the cords of  our hearts

Perplexed
In a riddle

Amazed
In a daze

Searching
In a quest

Love
In a tenderness

Winning
In a triumph

Losing
In a fall

Emptiness
In a void

Pain
In a heartache

Lonely
In a separation

Death
In the end

It has come and gone
This thing known as love
It  makes us in the beginging
But it will break us in the end


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1 posted 2001-06-24 07:31 PM


very good!    I like this one a lot  
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2 posted 2001-06-24 08:04 PM


Yay! Another good one from you!
Rhonda  

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3 posted 2001-06-24 08:10 PM


There are sometimes when that it too true.

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4 posted 2001-06-24 08:57 PM


"This thing known as love
It  makes us in the beginging
But it will break us in the end"

I cannot express how true this really is.  I'm convinced now that love only ends in heartache.  Nice job.  I really enjoyed this.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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5 posted 2001-06-24 09:57 PM


I loved the format on this one!
Great post.
Wonderful read!

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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6 posted 2001-06-25 12:12 PM


Lone Wolf-
   wow!  this is a powerful write!!
   i really like this!  

   smiles,
   ~vicky

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heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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7 posted 2001-06-25 12:18 PM


powerful yet full of truth...i liked this one aLOT...great job!...enjoyed greatly ...bye

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8 posted 2001-06-25 05:02 AM


i agree with marie...that stanza was awesome. great work lone wolf.  
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9 posted 2001-06-25 09:04 AM


Great work Lonewolf this was awesome and I thourghily enjoyed the read  
Andrew

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10 posted 2001-06-25 10:32 AM


i told you again  

one morning you wake up afraid you are going to live

LoneWolf
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11 posted 2001-06-25 10:38 AM


LOL, yah i guess you did.
And thank you all for your replies

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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12 posted 2001-06-25 07:33 PM


I don't believe that Love is what breaks us in the end.  It's mostly the other person's lies and disrespec that causes it.  Be strong my friend.  Keep your chin up  

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13 posted 2001-06-25 10:17 PM


this is great...really great! thanks for sharin!!!!!!

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Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

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14 posted 2001-06-25 10:33 PM


I liked the way you did the middle of the poem...with just two lines. I found it effective.  
This is extremely well written! Keep it up!  

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

LoneWolf
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15 posted 2001-06-26 07:32 PM


Thank you for your replies

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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16 posted 2001-06-26 11:54 PM


I really love how you wrote this poem. Very powerful! I thought this was pretty darn good, in fact. Impressed the heck out of me.
VERY nice.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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17 posted 2001-07-03 02:17 AM


"This thing known as love
It  makes us in the beginging
But it will break us in the end"

i loved that part. but i agree with acire. i know it can hurt, but it heals.
*hugs all*
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

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18 posted 2001-07-04 05:44 PM


awesome! the format was unique, i dig that. its great to read poems that dont have the "norm" format. keep posting

*dq

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