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anonymous albert ?
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0 posted 06-24-2001 12:19 AM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for anonymous albert ?



Angel, angel…can you come ?
And show me the way to love, dear friend…
Cause I’ll leave my heart with you
All my trust and faith will be true

So we can lay on the hills
In smiling faces, as we caress the love we share
Even though time will come for us to depart
But our souls will remain not less apart

So be my love
So be my friend

Just come and be with me
Cause I need your love in reality
Still climbing hills
To see if you are there

My lonely heart cant take this…
Fear of never seeing you, as I go blind
Hoping it’ll be soon
As I wait for you this time

So be my love
So be my friend

As I sit down in the corner
And cry with my head down on my knees
My tears fall and fall constantly
Please, can you wipe them for me?

Cause right now, I’m sad
That I can only see you with my eyes closed…
So…angel, angel… can you come…
And show me the way to love, dear friend ?


jun.7


...its still incomplete.



[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-24-2001).]

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1 posted 06-24-2001 12:56 AM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

Albert!  
Wow! I liked this one ALOT! Great work here. Just Beautiful! Incomplete you say??? Goodness then- I can't wait to see the finished product. I love your writing Albert.   Keep posting!

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2 posted 06-24-2001 01:08 AM       View Profile for katherine   Email katherine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for katherine

this is amazing! i love it, it's so beautiful.
keep it up
katie

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3 posted 06-24-2001 11:50 AM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Albert.. wow.  The emotion in this piece is breathtaking.  You've portrayed so much pain... so much wanting and yearning to be with that special someone.  Your time will come, my friend.  And when it does, I will be so happy for you.  The love of your life will show up somewhere very unexpected and sweep you off your feet, rest assured.
I enjoyed this poem very much.  This is a beautiful display of the talent you hold.  Nice work, Albert.  We'll talk later  

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4 posted 06-24-2001 01:07 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Great work Albert, it might be me but I'm sure I haven't seen you post for a while so it's great to see something by you, and I really enjoyed the read  
Andrew

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5 posted 06-24-2001 02:33 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

I agree with everyone on this, what an outstanding piece of work.  It's a change of pace from what I'm used to reading from you, it's more emotional and personal than I would expect.  It's still very, very good.
I love the way you drew the angel out for the reader, without really describing it much at all.  It gave a sense of desparation.
Great work, Albert.  You've truly impressed me.
~Allan

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6 posted 06-24-2001 02:37 PM       View Profile for chasing rain   Email chasing rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chasing rain

Hey Alby!  
Beautiful write! It's gorgeous! The way you express your emotions in this piece...wow. And how you portray the angel...I'm impressed at you Alby! Can't wait to see the finished product!  

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

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7 posted 06-24-2001 03:10 PM       View Profile for Jenn Cirrincione   Email Jenn Cirrincione   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jenn Cirrincione

Wow I loved this much!!! Great job Alberta!

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8 posted 06-24-2001 06:51 PM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

I promise I won't hurt your feelings. Anyway, it's still incomplete? Well what are you waiting for? Can you please finish it? I like it a lot! Fin-ish, fin-ish... please?
Rhonda  

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9 posted 06-24-2001 07:16 PM       View Profile for LoneWolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoneWolf

Wow this absolutly wonderful. i totally loved this one. its most definatly going to my library. and i can't wait to see it when its complete. this was just awesome.

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10 posted 06-24-2001 07:24 PM       View Profile for DarkAngelOfTheStars   Email DarkAngelOfTheStars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DarkAngelOfTheStars

aww this was so great! i loved it. keep up the good work....it was so great i loved the end!

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11 posted 06-24-2001 07:33 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

this brought tears to my eyes.....*sniff*.....wonderful Albert  
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12 posted 06-24-2001 11:26 PM       View Profile for obscurity of cloud   Email obscurity of cloud   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for obscurity of cloud

Albert!  This is beautiful, it's amazing, it's all the good things everyone has said times a billion.  It has such a whimsical flow, it's almost lyrical.  Incredible job, keep em coming!

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13 posted 06-25-2001 04:20 AM       View Profile for apsara   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for apsara

This is simply spectacular. I can't wait to read the final product. Great job.

apsara
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14 posted 06-25-2001 10:20 AM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

Can't wait to see the rest of the poem.
BRAVO Albert
~*standing ovation*~

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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15 posted 06-25-2001 11:35 AM       View Profile for Shygirl82   Email Shygirl82   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shygirl82

Seriously now..this poem just about blew me away...excellent...I loved it...I cant wait to read the rest....
~Nikki~
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awwwwwwwwwww, ALBIE!!!!! I wuvs you hunny!!! gosh...you are a great writer...I hope this gets finished soon!! this is soooo cool!! goin in my library...I dun care if it's not done yet!!!!!!

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17 posted 06-26-2001 02:51 AM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

alberta!!!!! *jumps on alberta and hugs him tight*
... ...wowowowoowowzers dude!!.. .this is the most awesome piece ive read in a long time!!.......its soooooo beautiful!!!..i LOVE it already!!.. .wowowow....youve done an amazing job with it already its truly astounding poetry ablerta..im totally blown away by it ...AGPFAGP????.....hells yeah!!....now if only my name was angel.....
..you are a poet with amazing talent dear alberta.....just make sure you write a bit more often cuz we need more from you buddy!!!!. ...alberta...bye  

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it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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18 posted 06-27-2001 01:09 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Ok I'm going to look like the mean guy here but I didn't like this one much. I thought it had a lot of emotion but I felt that the emotion lacked POWER. I think you can do better and add some more feeling to this. I also felt that the poem went steadily forward rather than have a beginning, a rise, and a fall....some nice conclusion.
I know you can do this....
Anyhow, I liked what you have so far, and hope to see the end version of this one since it's not complete.

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19 posted 06-28-2001 06:13 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Albertia, so sad yet so deep at the same time. Hopefully you are feeling a bit better and if you need to talk some more, you know where to find me.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

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20 posted 07-03-2001 02:23 AM       View Profile for knightlyshadows   Email knightlyshadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for knightlyshadows

wow this just blew my mind. it was lovely albert. i loved it. *hugs*
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I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 07-03-2001).]

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21 posted 07-08-2001 06:11 AM       View Profile for Kicking Kim   Email Kicking Kim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kicking Kim's Home Page   View IP for Kicking Kim

Wow, Albert this was amazing!  I really enjoyed it and the structure and rhythm.  I cannot wait to see the polished piece - if you ever find anything wrong with it!!  This was a great read.  

    

^*~Kicking Kim~*^

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22 posted 07-08-2001 12:33 PM       View Profile for Ina   Email Ina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ina

This was outstanding. Im putting this in my libary.  

Regina

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23 posted 07-08-2001 03:07 PM       View Profile for zarina   Email zarina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for zarina

It's very nice. I liked it alot.
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24 posted 11-03-2002 02:49 AM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

heh...Just reading this one again Alberta
Read my reply and thought "Man, was I on e that day?"

Love what you do...

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