Albert.. wow. The emotion in this piece is breathtaking. You've portrayed so much pain... so much wanting and yearning to be with that special someone. Your time will come, my friend. And when it does, I will be so happy for you. The love of your life will show up somewhere very unexpected and sweep you off your feet, rest assured. I enjoyed this poem very much. This is a beautiful display of the talent you hold. Nice work, Albert. We'll talk later
"Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising. So this old world must still be spinning 'round. And I still love you." –James T
I agree with everyone on this, what an outstanding piece of work. It's a change of pace from what I'm used to reading from you, it's more emotional and personal than I would expect. It's still very, very good. I love the way you drew the angel out for the reader, without really describing it much at all. It gave a sense of desparation. Great work, Albert. You've truly impressed me. ~Allan
Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. ~Unknown
alberta!!!!! *jumps on alberta and hugs him tight* ... ...wowowowoowowzers dude!!.. .this is the most awesome piece ive read in a long time!!.......its soooooo beautiful!!!..i LOVE it already!!.. .wowowow....youve done an amazing job with it already its truly astounding poetry ablerta..im totally blown away by it ...AGPFAGP????.....hells yeah!!....now if only my name was angel..... ..you are a poet with amazing talent dear alberta.....just make sure you write a bit more often cuz we need more from you buddy!!!!. ...alberta...bye
"Life is not long and boring, it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-
San Juan, Puerto Rico
Ok I'm going to look like the mean guy here but I didn't like this one much. I thought it had a lot of emotion but I felt that the emotion lacked POWER. I think you can do better and add some more feeling to this. I also felt that the poem went steadily forward rather than have a beginning, a rise, and a fall....some nice conclusion. I know you can do this.... Anyhow, I liked what you have so far, and hope to see the end version of this one since it's not complete.
I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.
I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily