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the_rescue
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0 posted 2001-06-22 02:16 PM


I checked it once I checked it twice
I wrote the first poem like three blind mice
I'm the first in this forum can't you see
the first poem was written by me.
Like doctor suess not in a house
or not with a mouse
but I was the first to write right here
but you will like it have no fear
The first in forum five
cause I, I will survive
so now that it's here second best
cause I was the first I beat all the rest



I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say, I'm not asking you to hate me I just want you to relate don't forget about the message or the reason where on stage...dogwood

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1 posted 2001-06-22 02:28 PM


very cute!!  
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2 posted 2001-06-22 03:04 PM


Ha, so you're the first one eh  
just don't forget to keep sharing

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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3 posted 2001-06-22 03:10 PM


this was a awesome poem, nice job.

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if music was a weapon, many ppl would be dead

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4 posted 2001-06-22 03:22 PM


This is VERY cute.

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5 posted 2001-06-22 04:38 PM


Hahahaha LOL I really liked this one. VERY well done. You start off forum #5 in the best way possible, with fun.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-06-22 05:08 PM


haha this was cute i enjoyed it keep writing  

one morning you wake up afraid you are going to live

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7 posted 2001-06-22 05:10 PM


nice.  i like to open with a humorous tone myself.  here we go again!

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8 posted 2001-06-22 05:58 PM


yaaaay lol this is cute!! i have a question...can we still post in teen poetry #4 or r we supposed to post in this one now?? just curious.  lol an amusing way to start #5 out with.  nice work rescue.  later
-fear-

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9 posted 2001-06-22 06:20 PM


probably a bit longer in 4 but I recomend posting in here now that 5 is open!!  
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10 posted 2001-06-22 06:30 PM


Oh hooray! That was so cute!  

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11 posted 2001-06-22 06:36 PM


LOL...very cute!  
enjoyed this one..

smiles,
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heart, you have not truely met the poet."
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12 posted 2001-06-23 02:20 AM


hahaha...i liked this poem ...and arent you special ...enjoyed the read...bye

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katherine
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13 posted 2001-06-23 03:02 AM


hahaha cuteness
katie

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14 posted 2001-06-23 11:18 AM


Good work, I enjoyed the read and you have the honour to be the first person to post here.  
Zu

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15 posted 2001-06-23 01:44 PM


This is cute!  I enjoyed this.  Hehe.. keep posting all your work.

--Marie

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16 posted 2001-06-23 01:46 PM


This is incredible.  Best poem I've ever read.  
I look forward to reading more... you just blew me away.

~Allan

DYME
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17 posted 2001-06-23 02:55 PM


Cute and creative  

No weapon formed against me shall prosper... ISAIAH 54:17

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18 posted 2001-06-23 05:17 PM


lol! Cute, simple and somewhat short...great job!  

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19 posted 2001-06-23 06:01 PM


congrats!  I was... (hold on)...12th.  well at least the 12th poem.  go me!!!
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20 posted 2001-06-24 03:31 PM


*glares jealously*  

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

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21 posted 2001-06-25 09:28 PM


that is really cute, lol. really cute

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22 posted 2001-07-05 01:24 AM


I know- I'm a lil late to reply...  
Better late than never!
Cute stuff here Rescue.
Quite creative.  
It put a smile on my face.

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23 posted 2001-07-06 03:06 AM


heh this was cute  

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