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Decaflame
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since 2001-05-11
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0 posted 2001-07-10 12:37 PM


You Identify

oh but you ranted
away in screams
of delight
in fright I cowered
under the I love yous
that raged between
my thighs
in cries
of
one

then you cried for
losses acquired
for you lost mean of
all transpired

that was when
I grew afraid
for you did not know
ecstasy when
you heard it

one of us
still naive to
the world
remain
forever
strapped
in

heart


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Deep in the heart
1 posted 2001-07-10 12:51 PM


Wonderful read.  Beautiful.  Thought provoking.
Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
2 posted 2001-07-10 01:10 PM


You know, this is the first time that I've stopped to read your "critique" message. I like the way you've expressed it, very poetic! Loved the poem, but then all of your works are fantastic!

*smiles*
~Tier

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By the sea
3 posted 2001-07-10 01:23 PM


"one of us
still naive to
the world
remain
forever
strapped
in

heart"

This is very perceptive and true.  Nice work, Deca.

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

brian madden
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ireland
4 posted 2001-07-10 02:41 PM


Sensual and beautiful.

"Here I am in prison,here I am with a ball and chain There is whiskey in the jar-o" Traditional irish song.

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2004-04-28 04:01 AM



Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
6 posted 2004-04-28 04:49 PM


Deca!!  Deca!!  Deca!!
How could I have missed this?
Oh maybe I wasn't here then...or was I?
Wonderfully sensual write.


~I love you - those three words have my life in them.~

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