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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-07-10 08:37 AM

Between the inhale
And exhale,
Of the short breath
Of time we were together,
At that moment when
I was filled with
The essence of you,
I did not know
Letting you go
Would be at once,
Both a relief and agony.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-07-10 08:45 AM

that very, very, very fine line....

well done Sir!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2001-07-10 10:32 AM

Well said my friend. "The agony and the ecstacy" of separation.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2001-07-10 10:46 AM

Sometimes it's like this...James

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

4 posted 2001-07-10 10:59 AM

Between the inhale
And exhale,
Of the short breath
Of time we were together,

Very nicely phrased and captured. I like this a lot. I enjoy being inspired by your minimalism -- a fresh contrast to my usual style.

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear; few can listen."

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

5 posted 2001-07-10 01:05 PM

Beautiful ......
I really enjoyed the quite surrender of this one.

Thank you Ron......
**************************

It's only me.......only me
I hope that would suffice eternally

{{to cross a sea of wonder, and hold close at heart all dreams}}

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2001-07-10 01:10 PM

ewww...for a second I thought this would be about inhalants again. But this is very deftly written...much admiration here!

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2001-07-10 01:11 PM

Oh, how powerfully true this can be, absolutely!!! I think I need to send this to a friend that leads a hope for healing group for survivors of death/divorce and other major stresses on a life. May I?

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

8 posted 2001-07-10 01:40 PM

Press
your lips together
softly & blow,
all the while
remembering..."

loved this, Ron/b>...

~Tier

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

9 posted 2001-07-10 01:46 PM

This is VERY well expressed and I know that feeling. Good writing!

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

cpalmer
Senior Member

since 2001-06-26

Posts 977
Phoenix, Az

10 posted 2001-07-10 09:28 PM

I love this one! I know that letting go can be so good yet so bad at the same time...you put it into words so beautifully
Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

11 posted 2001-07-10 10:26 PM

Parting is such sweet sorrow.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

12 posted 2001-07-11 06:47 AM

Well written expression of ambivalence! Enjoyable!

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

13 posted 2001-11-11 03:49 AM

CPAT, this poem tugs at the heartstrings...
Thank you for a great read PoetFriend
*~coco~*

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