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Open Poetry #14

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BirdeeB
Member

since 2000-09-16

Posts 106
USA

0 posted 2001-07-07 10:35 PM

frustrated I look at you
weeping on the inside
pleading with my head
feeling with my heart.
Could this be the day,
could this be the day that I
blow you away.

Twisted with hatred
this is my forgotten
hell. (shattered voices yell)

your eyes drip with
sympathy, i wipe it away
with a smile to let you
know that i am quietly
sane.

Stuck in web of rage
Let me out of my CAGE.
Let me be ok.
Let me go insane.

I'm going to lay my head
down.
Please don't let me drown
away in
my dreams.

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

1 posted 2001-07-07 11:23 PM

Very nice write....it has a musical quality to it. For some reason it feels to me like a song.
~Krista

"Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you.
And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
~Winnie the Pooh

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-07-08 01:56 AM

I really like how you've written this. It's powerful and clearly stated and the first of yours I've read, as I recall. Will watch for more, enjoyed!

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

3 posted 2001-07-09 01:23 PM

Written with the power of a pressure-cooker ready to explode..........

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