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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2000-12-03 04:49 PM



The way I sometimes cry
Tears cannot describe
For we still seek real holding
And I fear that I may die

The way I sometimes feel
Lonely neither can describe
It's an ache and longing
For you and it's so real

So I write my poetry
And neither can it do
Justice to the feelings felt
When I think of you

It doesn't nearly tell the world
My addictive need to pen
My thoughts of you on paper
As I sit here in my den

For you are my only comfort
All the ease my heart can find
All that keeps me in my sleep
Or when my waking moments bind

Inspiration's often lacking
When I want to write of you
When my muse abandons me
And I sit idly blue

I want to tell of my desire for you
To put my fire in words
To let all its intensity
Fly out like flocks of birds

To tell you that I love you
Can't express my fullest thought
Love is just not word enough
To tell the love you've wrought

So I'm stuck sometimes with paltry rhymes
At times when my words fail
When images of butterflies
Or waterfalls won't sail

All I can give this moment
All God's given me to write
That you're my lovely Gueniviere
And I'm your Lochinvar this night



There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Mar

© Copyright 2000 Wilfred Yeats - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-12-03 04:54 PM


...but I do believe...

you just did...


Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Elizabeth
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2 posted 2000-12-03 05:06 PM


The perfect companion to Janet's poem.
Martie
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3 posted 2000-12-03 05:31 PM


Bill..The first stanza of this poem made me want to cry too...

Your feelins are not paultry, nor are your rhymes...This poem is a painting of love felt and expressed beautifully.

Kethry
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4 posted 2000-12-03 05:47 PM


Wil,
my word! There's a plague of passionate, powerful, poetry going around this site and this is no exception.
Write on
Kethry


Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant - Thoreau



Aimster
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5 posted 2000-12-03 07:44 PM


~Wilfred

This is so beautiful!! I love the word
choice you used in this...and I do
believe you have just expressed how
you felt and quite wonderfully i might
add. truly enjoyed reading this!

take care.
~amy~

Butterflies_dont_cry
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6 posted 2000-12-03 07:50 PM


Sir Poet Bill*
You ARE poetry my friend...this is so whimsical and beautiful...never do you cease
to amaze and delight me with your weaves~


The best and most beautiful things
in the world cannot be seen or even touched
---- they must be felt with the heart~
*??*

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7 posted 2000-12-03 07:53 PM


Written with true feeling Bill..and from the depths of your kind heart..as always

                    ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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8 posted 2000-12-03 08:43 PM



Wilfred, this poem is filled with so much love of heart it brought tears to my eyes...
Having read the eloquence of your words on screen I gotta tell ya PoetFriend you scored a home run on your poetic expression here...

As always Wilfred, the pleasure is mine
coco

Janet Marie
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9 posted 2000-12-03 10:19 PM


To tell you that I love you
Can't express my fullest thought
Love is just not word enough
To tell the love you've wrought

So I'm stuck sometimes with paltry rhymes
At times when my words fail
When images of butterflies
Or waterfalls won't sail

All I can give this moment
All God's given me to write
That you're my lovely Gueniviere
And I'm your Lochinvar this night

================
well you KNOW Im loving this right..
Its so cool to see "my" poetry thru another poets eyes...this is beautiful Bill,
written with all the love and desperation of Romeo and Juliet ...
wonderful emoitve romantic bittersweet piece
thank you for allowing my words to inspire you and for sharing it.
later-Lochinvar-gator  
jm

I looked into the sky for my anthem
The words and music came through
But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen
Looking into you

Wilfred Yeats
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10 posted 2000-12-04 12:36 PM


To all of you for your lovely responses - and especially JM for giving me (a 2nd time) a poem of hers - to feed on and inspire me. I know my love has found it plasing - and that makes it triply appreciated.
Paula Finn
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11 posted 2000-12-04 01:08 AM


I canna see for the tears in my eyes...beautiful
Wilfred Yeats
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12 posted 2000-12-04 11:21 AM


Paula-
there's nothing to cry about - thank you ~S~

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13 posted 2000-12-04 12:45 PM


Sir, you continue to amaze. . . and I continue to learn. . . thank you. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


inot2B
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14 posted 2000-12-04 02:13 PM


I know you'll always have your muse
just close your eyes and she'll be there
your pen and heart are joined so the
words will always flow.

Gemini
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15 posted 2000-12-04 02:37 PM


Wilfred, You've painted a heartfelt image here, very nicely done.  I am in awe of your talent, consider yourself hugged.
Sunshine
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16 posted 2001-01-01 11:08 AM


Counting Blessings...

Wilfred Yeats
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17 posted 2001-01-01 01:48 PM


Sven-
Nothing special - I just get lucky - Thank you so much  

inot2B-
I really love your replies - they do wonders for my self esteem - Thank you

Gemini-
I can't get enough hugs - I'll take them constantly -   Thank you so much

Karilea -
Thanks twice again - for the BTTT (I'd overlooked unresponded replies) and You caring  - that means so very much   Thank you, thank you, thank you

Janet Marie
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18 posted 2001-07-06 05:19 PM


Treasure Chest ....
Denise
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19 posted 2001-07-06 08:56 PM


You are in our thoughts and prayers, Bill. God bless you and your family.
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Thinking of you WY........
Sunshine
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21 posted 2001-07-06 09:09 PM


Thanks to the Administrators for moving this here, so new members can get to know our Wilfred Yeats.  He has many, many more treasures, such as this, in the archives.
Martie
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22 posted 2001-07-06 09:21 PM


Oh my...seeing these words again and under these circumstances makes me wordless with weep.  Thank you!
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23 posted 2001-07-06 09:22 PM


Wilfred~

'All I can give this moment
All God's given me to write'


Many more, my friend ... many more~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                               noles1@totcon.com             

Nan
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24 posted 2001-07-06 09:32 PM


We love you too, Bill... God Bless...

Poet deVine
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We'll lift you up on the wings of our love...
Irish Rose
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26 posted 2001-07-06 09:51 PM


so good to read this from you, Bill, please take care of yourself and God bless.


Honeybee
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27 posted 2001-07-06 10:14 PM



It's good to see you gracing Passions again, Bill

And this was a lovely re-entrance  

Take care!
Melissa~

Titia Geertman
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28 posted 2001-07-06 10:28 PM


Life was given to this man
and he shared his beautiful poetry
Life is to be taken from this man
and it's the WHY that I fail to see


My thoughts are with him and his family

Titia Geertman


A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace&naventryid=100

[This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 07-07-2001).]

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29 posted 2001-07-06 11:01 PM



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We love you Bill......

Just see how virtue repays you, you turn and someone betrays you
Betray him first, and the game's reversed...
-from The Scarlet Pimpernel


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31 posted 2001-07-07 12:10 PM


quote:
Sven-
Nothing special - I just get lucky - Thank you so much


how about getting lucky one more time my friend??  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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32 posted 2001-07-07 02:24 AM


Well I am new here, and have only heard of the love for you all these people have for you Bill.  I have no words of my own so if I may, I will quote yours:
"To tell you that I love you
Can't express my fullest thought
Love is just not word enough
To tell the love you've wrought",
It would appear that there is a huge outcrying of love for you, and no one seems to be stuck for words in telling you that they care, love your work and you.  I send you some strength and will keep you in my prayers.  This was a poem that said more of love than I have read in a very long time.  Take care.

If I made you smile today then I did my job!
 ~* Mysteria *~

doreen peri
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33 posted 2001-07-07 02:30 AM


*sigh* bill, you're such a fine poet!!!! we love you........
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34 posted 2001-07-07 02:31 AM


here is a critique since you encourage them Bill. "Just be cool and when the angel comes don't be afraid"
Elizabeth Santos
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35 posted 2001-07-07 06:35 AM


Bill, dear Bill
Oh love,
Oh life,
Oh poet,
Take my hand once more
And walk with me
Through poetry
For evermore
Liz

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36 posted 2001-07-09 11:15 AM


I can't describe... my grief.
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37 posted 2001-07-09 12:24 PM


This was such a wonderful inspired write.  
We will miss your pen Wil....

Parker

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