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Interloper
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Deep in the heart

0 posted 2001-07-06 11:46 AM


some are like icebergs
showing their tips openly
hiding the greater

some are like redwoods
standing majestically
hiding only roots

speak of potential
unfathomed iceberg
so much to draw on

redwoods standing tall
grow in nature’s harmony
towering bastions

both will live long lives
both will be measured by man
redwoods fall to axe
icebergs shrink, back to the sea
from whence they were born
redwoods, recycled, live on
both remembered for grandeur


Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth


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1 posted 2001-07-06 11:47 AM


Some...poets...indeed....

well done Sir...

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2 posted 2001-07-06 11:52 AM


yes, I like the redwoods one   grew up around them  
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3 posted 2001-07-06 11:55 AM


nice images and metaphors... one giving shade to cool... the other cold in nayure, hidden in most part..gradually revealing more of themsleves..as time passes and they warm...

enjoyed this image...

let's see..inspiration perhaps:

Having broken off
and now floating free
only part of the whole
can be seen
without diving deeper
into cold waters

drifting on currents
past shorelines
of green,
I offer no hold
for life but the
occaisional visitor
who finds the
temperature to inclimate
for along stay

but under it all
I was once snowflakes

free falling
from grace
or perhaps....


Towering
deep rooted
I have stood
too long
to move

I can offer
respite
from heat
in my shade
but I can not
go with you
when you leave

So now
I wait for storms
and time
or greed
to change me


darn it.... so many possibilites on where you can go with these idea...

I think I had best leave this one up to you..

Again... I enjoyed greatly... and appreciate the making me think..

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4 posted 2001-07-06 12:33 PM


Lady ~ Thank you.  "Some" poets?  Hmmm ...  

SEA ~ Yes, but icebergs regale you like diamonds in a brooch.

Ron ~ I HATE it when I get upstaged  

You really should post this and/or work on more possibilities with that fertile mind of yours.

Hmmmm, fertile ... Just what IS that  stuff

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth


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5 posted 2001-07-06 12:47 PM


Dear Sir... certainly not trying to upstage anyone... if it so appears..I should put reign on my replies. I have a habit of springboarding off other ideas..and mean it as compliment indeed to your work...
as for fertile.. I believe we called that manure back home.... and yes..I am full of it..( grinning)


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6 posted 2001-07-06 01:55 PM


Clapping. Wonderful. Redwoods and icebergs...super ... good for you.  Bob
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7 posted 2001-07-06 01:57 PM


Interloper--I enjoyed this look at individuality...and I'm so glad for it!
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8 posted 2001-07-06 02:46 PM


Wonderful metaphors Interloper ... I loved the comparisons you've drawn in this piece, lovely imagery!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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9 posted 2001-07-06 03:53 PM


InterLoper~
I simply love where your inspire takes you ... and me ! !

This is a marvelously done piece.
*smiling*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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10 posted 2001-07-06 07:35 PM


Ron ~ You may take up 5 or 6 pages for your comments if you wish.
*sniff**sniff*


Bob ~ Thanks for the clapping  

Martie ~ Thank you very much indeed.

Kit ~ A rare honor   Thank you for taking the time to read my work.  

Marge ~ Gee, sounds like I found an acorn, huh?

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth


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11 posted 2001-07-06 11:53 PM


Both will be measured by man...for some reason that line jumped out at me.  Enjoyed much!
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12 posted 2001-07-07 12:05 PM


Wow...I'm impressed!     Those are great metaphors...completely original.

A great piece!
~Krista  

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And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
~Winnie the Pooh

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13 posted 2001-07-07 12:16 PM


some poets indeed. . .

well done Sir. . .

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