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Goodbye........At Last?
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Goodbye........At Last? |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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At first I swear I bore your taste, this sober hindsight resents, I do recall the pillows laced for a while with your fragrance. A few strands left in my hairbrush, some lacy things left in my chest, a birthday card with Hallmark mush echoed an almost empty nest. Your big white dog I gave away we got on but she screamed betrayal. gone to acreage with kids to play, young folks at my last garage sale. In a grog of a moonless reach, cross the width of a queenless bed, the last few lessons you would teach now I dreamless, sleep like the dead. When I moved I found silk ties, from my center burst our last flame, ne'er this passion romanticize now limp as those ties on bedframe. Both longing, resentment are gone and time lightens shades of the drear, I'm sure you are fine my doe eyed blond, what of me for it's been o'er a year? |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...cross the width of a queenless bed... wonderful imagery! Enjoyed the angst! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
cross the width of a queenless bed... Sunshine picked my favorite line..and the sadness of this speaks to my heart and cries out for solace. Exceptional writing. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Most eloquent and flavored very nicely with imagery: When I moved I found silk ties, from my center burst our last flame, ne'er this passion romanticize now limp as those ties on bedframe. I love the multi-layeredness of this stanza. Very finely crafted, RS. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Haunting images in this one, Richard. It just aches of good-bye. All writing comes |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"In a grog of a moonless reach, cross the width of a queenless bed, the last few lessons you would teach now I dreamless, sleep like the dead." this is fantastic writing  |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Thank you good people, I needed a bit of encouragement c'est soir. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
This might just be the finest offering to date. Have I mentioned you Texicans can shore rite gud? |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Im in a kingless bed haa...enjoyed RS ~Victoria~ Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up. |
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