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The Night the Sky Exploded
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The Night the Sky Exploded |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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(reposted from 7-5-00, with a few changes) The Night the Sky Exploded Can we open that night again when the moon curved around its shadow and the air hummed when I leaned against you into your arms weight as you crept your hand around then cupped my waiting as we watched the night explode across the western sky you whispered something into my ear and it didn’t matter what for your breath was like fire cascading chartreuse ribbons as whistling energy erupted into coins that melted behind the palm trees and turned to sand along the beach that waited in the horizon I could see the musk and sultry strands of my life fizzle and turn to wishes as the moon burned in the ocean cooled your scarlet eyes in the blue of them I fell and you just smiled as your hand held the sky against my cheek I wondered then if all this searching had led to this conclusion for the sand was warm and held in my passion but if I moved just so against you I would be for one minute complete and then the sky exploded. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I like this Martie. I keep sweet memories on hand just to make me feel better sometimes. Um, can I borrow this one, maybe?  MMMMMMMMarvelous MMMMMMMartie does it again! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marvelous Martie indeed....fireworks in slow motion.... Yum! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Oh, I know exactly how you feel, Martie. Wow. Great writing! All writing comes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Can we open that night again when the moon curved around its shadow and the air hummed when I leaned against you into your arms weight as you crept your hand around then cupped my waiting ==================================== for your breath was like fire cascading chartreuse ribbons as whistling energy erupted into coins that melted behind the palm trees and turned to sand along the beach that waited in the horizon I could see the musk and sultry strands of my life fizzle and turn to wishes as the moon burned in the ocean cooled your scarlet eyes in the blue of them I fell and you just smiled as your hand held the sky against my cheek I wondered then if all this searching had led to this conclusion for the sand was warm and held in my passion but if I moved just so against you I would be for one minute complete and then the sky exploded. =================================== OH MAN ... have mercy on me muse ... This was amazing before...and now... *shaking my head* ... I just gotta get a new muse... this is some of the coolest imagery Martie... and the emotional intend...poetry in motion big ole *SIGH* waiting to happen  Now I have a matched set of this one in me library.  We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Yes, thank you for putting this one up again, since I didn't have the pleasure of reading it the first time around! I must agree...I am in absolute awe of your imagery! Amazing! Truly incredible work, Martie...thanks again... sp  it was love that first drew me, |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah such beautiful poetry! Typical Martie poetry treasure! "you whispered something into my ear and it didn’t matter what for your breath was like fire cascading chartreuse ribbons as whistling energy erupted into coins that melted behind the palm trees and turned to sand along the beach that waited in the horizon I could see the musk and sultry strands of my life fizzle and turn to wishes as the moon burned in the ocean cooled your scarlet eyes in the blue of them I fell and you just smiled as your hand held the sky against my cheek" Wow such great writing! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Breathtaking! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wonderful write ... enjoyed this immensly!! |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Captivating. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
martie, this was just breathtaking. the emotional intensity combined with the imagery and depth of writing leaves me awestruck! im amazed by your talent. just breathless... take care. amy "but i see your true colors, |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
lovely and tender, Martie, caressing to the reader |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
library |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yeah, it happens that way... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
stunning poetry dearFriend... Hugs2u *~coco~* |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Sounds like some warm sand got caught in some clothing... This is a beautiful love story. I can only applaud the other comments, but not improve on them. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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