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The Night the Sky Exploded

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Martie
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(reposted from 7-5-00, with a few changes)

    The Night the Sky Exploded


Can we open that night again
when the moon curved around its shadow
and the air hummed
when I leaned against you
into your arms weight
as you crept your hand around
then cupped my waiting
as we watched the night explode
across the western sky

you whispered something into my ear
and it didnít matter what
for your breath was like fire
cascading chartreuse ribbons
as whistling energy erupted into coins
that melted behind the palm trees
and turned to sand along the beach
that waited in the horizon

I could see the musk and sultry strands
of my life fizzle and turn to wishes
as the moon burned in the ocean
cooled your scarlet eyes
in the blue of them I fell
and you just smiled
as your hand held the sky against my cheek

I wondered then if all this searching
had led to this conclusion
for the sand was warm and held in my passion
but if I moved just so against you
I would be for one minute   complete

and then the sky exploded.
© Copyright 2001 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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I like this Martie. I keep sweet memories on hand just to make me feel better sometimes. Um, can I borrow this one, maybe?  

MMMMMMMMarvelous MMMMMMMartie does it again!
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Marvelous Martie indeed....fireworks in slow motion....

Yum!
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Oh, I know exactly how you feel, Martie.  Wow.  Great writing!  

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by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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Can we open that night again
when the moon curved around its shadow
and the air hummed
when I leaned against you
into your arms weight
as you crept your hand around
then cupped my waiting

====================================
for your breath was like fire
cascading chartreuse ribbons
as whistling energy erupted into coins
that melted behind the palm trees
and turned to sand along the beach
that waited in the horizon

I could see the musk and sultry strands
of my life fizzle and turn to wishes
as the moon burned in the ocean
cooled your scarlet eyes
in the blue of them I fell
and you just smiled
as your hand held the sky against my cheek



I wondered then if all this searching
had led to this conclusion
for the sand was warm and held in my passion
but if I moved just so against you
I would be for one minute   complete

and then the sky exploded.
===================================

OH MAN ... have mercy on me muse ...
This was amazing before...and now...
*shaking my head* ...
I just gotta get a new muse...
this is some of the coolest imagery Martie...
and the emotional intend...poetry in motion
big ole *SIGH* waiting to happen  
Now I have a matched set of this one in me library.  

We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away,
Like the doors of heaven will swing wide open if we just find the right words to say.
~E. McCain

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Yes, thank you for putting this one up again, since I didn't have the pleasure of reading it the first time around!  I must agree...I am in absolute awe of your imagery!  Amazing!  Truly incredible work, Martie...thanks again...

sp  

it was love that first drew me,
it is love that will keep me here...
now I see love burning brightly
when everything else is unclear...

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Ah such beautiful poetry!   Typical Martie poetry treasure!

                "you whispered something into my ear
                 and it didnít matter what
                 for your breath was like fire
                 cascading chartreuse ribbons
                 as whistling energy erupted into coins
                 that melted behind the palm trees
                 and turned to sand along the beach
                 that waited in the horizon

                 I could see the musk and sultry strands
                 of my life fizzle and turn to wishes
                 as the moon burned in the ocean
                 cooled your scarlet eyes
                 in the blue of them I fell
                 and you just smiled
                 as your hand held the sky against my cheek"

Wow such great writing!
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Breathtaking!
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wonderful write ... enjoyed this immensly!!

RMW
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Captivating.
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martie,

this was just breathtaking. the
emotional intensity combined with
the imagery and depth of writing
leaves me awestruck! im amazed
by your talent. just breathless...

take care.
amy  

"but i see your true colors,
shining through...
i see your true colors
and that's why i love you"
~phil collins~

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lovely and tender, Martie, caressing to the reader
Janet Marie
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library
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yeah, it happens that way...
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stunning poetry dearFriend...
Hugs2u
*~coco~*
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15 posted 07-03-2004 11:58 PM       View Profile for kayjay   Email kayjay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kayjay

Sounds like some warm sand got caught in some clothing...
This is a beautiful love story. I can only applaud the other comments, but not improve on them.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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