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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-07-05 01:48 PM


On sand shift feet
that offer no footing
or foundation...
we ran the race for love
and slipped as we sank
ever deeper into each other
then hell...

Shell sliced heart
cut by broken razor edge
crustacions only trying to hide
vulnerable soft bellies
from harm.... we bled
and were drained.

Tides changed,
high and low
sunlight
memories washed away
as our love ebbed...
and the sands once again
showed no signs
of our passing


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Decaflame
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1 posted 2001-07-05 01:53 PM


I find myself holding my breath as my emotions were swept away by the underlying currents...the undertoe was fierce....

[This message has been edited by Decaflame (edited 07-05-2001).]

SEA
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with you
2 posted 2001-07-05 04:36 PM


this pulled...and tugged at my heart....
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3 posted 2001-07-05 04:43 PM


Thanks Deca.. I always Appreciate what you have to say..

SEA.. it is from a time in my life when it tugged and pulled at mine as well. Thanks for the comment...it is greatly appreciated

MARK V SHELDON
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4 posted 2001-07-05 07:14 PM


Ron:  you are a metaphor meister.  Very strong expression through a well-chosen comparison with the beach and its plethora of possibilities.

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear;  few can listen."

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Deep in the heart
5 posted 2001-07-05 07:17 PM


Time and tide will wash all away in their path.
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