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Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

0 posted 2001-07-04 03:36 AM

Lightning gilds her body
as she stands in the pouring rain.
Thunder echoes her wild heart,
yearning for something she cant quite touch.

He is there...in every drop of rain,
falling on her body,
touching her every need.
Rainkissed lips call his name.

And he is there
pulling her to him in the driving rain.
His lips follow the rain.
Does he hear the thunder...or is it her heart?

They slip to the ground
no longer aware of the raging storm.
Its a faint echo of their own.
Rain on their bodies.

Falling, falling,
a deluge of passions storm,
full blown and out of control,
a tempest in her eyes.

They ride the wind of longing,
til the thunder is just a memory.
and lightning no longer plays in the sky.
The storm dies a lovers death.

Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

1 posted 2001-07-04 03:41 AM

Wonderful, Paula, such imagery with all the fury of the storm,, well done...gentle smile

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2001-07-04 04:37 AM

Oh,Paula~
This is just lovely !
Excellent portrayal of emotions.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2001-07-05 05:15 AM

Paula-
   I love this!
   Very beautifully done..

   hugs.
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

4 posted 2001-07-05 06:44 AM

a tempest in her eyes...

lovely words, Paula

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2001-07-05 06:57 AM

"Does he hear the thunder...or is it her heart?"

You've captured this scene beautifully Paula ... wonderful imagery, very nicely written!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

6 posted 2001-07-05 09:34 AM

Wow, what beautiful imagery and passion. Well done indeed!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2001-07-05 04:59 PM

Good thing it's raining or you'd be on fire lady! THIS IS GORGEOUS!!! oh--and we'll swap nature stories later!

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

8 posted 2001-07-05 05:11 PM

Loved it. Beautifully written.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

9 posted 2001-07-06 04:10 AM

You've got this great way of writing romantic hot!.....

               "Falling, falling,
                a deluge of passions storm,
                full blown and out of control,
                a tempest in her eyes.

                They ride the wind of longing,
                til the thunder is just a memory.
                and lightning no longer plays in the sky.
                The storm dies a lovers death."

Very nice indeed!  Hummm!

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

10 posted 2001-07-07 04:32 AM

Logan...Im glad you liked this thanks

Marge...it was sweetly inspired thank you

Vicky...thank you sweetie

Wynter...thank you so much

Kit...thank you...it comes from playing in the rain...

Interloper...you are too kind thank you

serenity...HAHHAAH ok I'm all ears now....

Poeminister...glad you loved it thanks

ethome...heheh but romance can be hot babes...thanks

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