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Open Poetry #14

Afternoon Respite

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-07-03 12:15 PM

Afternoon Respite
Virginia Salter

haze clings to high rises
filled to the brim
busyness, mercantilism
straight, bony fingers
erect
towering over Lake Union
sunlight bounces from mobile bubbles
going to, fro, fore and aft
as white triangles gee and haw
across the pond
and I
mesmerized in my peace
solitude

© July 10, 2000

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-07-03 12:20 PM

nicely done VAS... captured a moment quite well... reminded me in some ways Of Bob's approach to writing... I enjoyed

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

2 posted 2001-07-04 12:04 PM

Very descriptive illusion of a metropolitan area.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2001-07-05 11:02 PM

VAS-
   ah...lovely write.
   you paint quite a picture here.

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-07-06 09:50 AM

Well done indeed. I would never have thought of using the "mule commands" to describe the jibing of sailboats.

Interesting and enjoyable read

And, like Ron, I'd like to read Bob's thoughts on this fine work of yours.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2001-07-06 09:56 AM

VAS,
Nice palette, enjoyed.

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