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Alicethruglass
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since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

0 posted 2001-07-03 05:47 AM

Beveled Thoughts

The me in the mirror
in glass, bevel edged
lips speaking thoughts
of memories dredged
angles of words,
twisted in form
lines, uneven
unmet, cooling warm

The glass corners chipped
no halo wear I
am not who you think
or imagine, with sigh
Expressed in the looking
a heart in despair
a need of forgiving,
one self in repair

If only the words
that could travel by line
were heeded in context
absorbed by a mind
understood in their meaning
each word, caring viewed
then what once had been always
could again be renewed...

If I walked
through the looking
to be nearest you
would alone still I be,
would you come into view
If I called for a voice
just a need for a word
would the silence of empty
be the all that I heard

On the walls
of morn's wake
I am beveled by two
in the looking glass take
I am mirrored to you.

~A~

Waseem Cheema
Member

since 2001-03-16

Posts 369
Pakistan

1 posted 2001-07-03 07:26 AM

Very nice written........

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

2 posted 2001-07-03 07:34 AM

This had a nice rhythym to it, particularly the last few stanzas.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2001-07-03 08:52 AM

The me in the mirror
in glass, bevel edged
lips speaking thoughts
of memories dredged
angles of words,
twisted in form
lines, uneven
unmet,

These were my favorite lines... clever word play here ties a beveled edge,angles and memories all together in a nice tight package...good work!!!!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-07-03 08:55 AM

An interesting write, and one that I will probably read over several times, to get it from all angles...

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

5 posted 2001-07-03 09:16 AM

To find comfort in thoughts of a past that is gone, to find peace with departed to make us feel strong, to torture ourselves for the words that weren't said, puts the mind in a spin and a storm in our head.

Life is life, we do the best we can.

Nice poem, enjoyed it a lot.

Keep up the good work.

Rick

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