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Waseem Cheema
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0 posted 2001-07-03 04:39 AM



HULCHUL
COMMOTION

Shaed issi ko muhabbat ho na khtay hain Waseem
Perhaps, this is called love Waseem
Ik hulchul si hey dil main muchi hoe
There is a commotion inside the heart

~Wasi~


I love to nice poetry.

[This message has been edited by Waseem Cheema (edited 07-03-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-07-03 08:40 AM


Perhaps it is...
this is a simple straight forward piece which says so much with what is unsaid..I enjoyed..


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2 posted 2001-07-03 08:47 AM


Oh yes, so very much said in two wonderfully simple, honest, straightforward lines...

well done, Waseem!

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3 posted 2001-07-03 05:56 PM


nice   waseem ..you are getting closer
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4 posted 2001-07-03 06:05 PM


Isn't that an ingredient of love ... commotion?  Well done with a thriftiness of words.  My kinda work  
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5 posted 2001-07-06 12:00 PM


Oh,Waseem~
I think you are very much right !
And very much wise !
I love it !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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6 posted 2001-07-06 01:48 AM


Wasi~   this is so, so sweet...one of my favorites from you. I'll just slip this one into my library  
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7 posted 2001-07-06 05:58 AM



Waseem-
   how right you are..
   this is wonderful..

   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Waseem Cheema
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8 posted 2001-07-06 06:15 AM


I am really very thankful to you all for such nice comments and LOVE  
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