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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-07-02 07:28 PM


Gloria

you thought
G-L-O-R-I-A was
created
just so you could dance
dance you did

all 5-2 and eyes of blue
of you

your shy pulled my shy
like magnets we
were inseparable, the
late 60’s belonging
to our memories

I miss you!

I was your lean and lanky
to your petite and pretty…

Your father took you on
his transfer, even after
pleas to please let you stay
three years
the longest time ever in
one place, brat that
you were, the AF
claimed him, but
O to finish high school
with friends of the girl
who had the Sandy/Sammy
eyes of blue, your shy

shimmered away in laughter
at my wry comments
that only you understood
making me
feel even that much taller
so I never wore heels
around your wearing heels
because we really belonged on
the same level

you and I…

we were best friends
and still would be…

I sent a pink rose bush to your mother
as anger at your father’s
decision didn’t let me do
anything but acknowledge
“Mrs. & Family…” but I really
knew her better than him
and was ashamed after
at my disrespect

your father needed
his family…I understood why he
wouldn’t allow mine to
guardian you to finish school…
he had served his time in
‘Nam and needed to hug all
tight…

sometimes survivors do that…

I sent a living reminder of
you after we had separated,  
school behind us, some college behind
us, me a newlywed, alone
in the house when your mother
called

“because you were her best
friend,”

in short simple words
as was her Appalachian
background she outlined
your having gone to church
to share your love of
God
to the students, she was so
proud of this act, that
you were teaching
others to follow in
His footsteps

part of you, oh so part of you…

how the semi came out in
front of you,

how she missed you.

She just wanted me to know.

I hung up, and screamed
why! why!

immediately coming to
mind only the good die young
but you were past young, oh
God! You were only 21….

I sent a living pink rose bush to
commemorate your memory
and hoped your Dad, or one
of your five brothers
would plant it

they did.

The following year your mother
called, “you were her best friend,”

and said that year
the rose bush bloomed beautiful…

pink, and red, roses.

I always enjoyed red roses.

I still miss you.

I plant
pink, and red roses.


© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Sven
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1 posted 2001-07-02 07:36 PM


a touching portrait of a time still too close for too many of us. . .

well done my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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2 posted 2001-07-02 08:30 PM


Ah shucks, another tissue alert!  The good thing about memories are that they creates works of art like this, and the good thing about living ones, is you get to cut them and bring them in the house, and as the fragrance sifts through the room and your heart, we smile!  Loved it, can you tell?

If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job!    ~* Mysteria *~

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3 posted 2001-07-02 08:50 PM


Karilea~
I *hug* you in understanding~
Beautiful teardrops ...
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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4 posted 2001-07-02 08:54 PM


Deeply touching write, Sunshine.  She is watching you from above. Always.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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5 posted 2001-07-02 09:34 PM


Karilea,

This truly touched me in a most private place.  I think it's one of your best.  I believe Gloria would be very proud of her friend and the talented writer that she's become.  I'm certain this lovely tribute brought to her a smile.  Well done!

Michael

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There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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6 posted 2001-07-02 10:49 PM


this is a powerful piece and no words i say can do it justice....

it brought tears to my eyes

it was so very well written......

this was the most dynamic, effective, and tremendously powerful work i've ever read from you......

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7 posted 2001-07-02 11:01 PM


Doreen...I never thought to put Gloria here, until a friend said today, "write about your best friend"...I have many, but I still have her, too..., and your comments? High praise, indeed...thank you...

Auguste, I thank you for mentioning that this touched you....she is still an angel to me...perhaps this was meant to be said, today...for reasons I shall know...later...

Lone Wolf, you are so right...thank you, dear, for reading...

Marge, our notes get smaller and smaller in understand...soon, we shall only leave initials...

Mysteria, yes, I can tell...

Sven...loss of loved ones always brings "that" time close to us...thank you so much for reading....


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8 posted 2001-07-02 11:11 PM


And a good friend you yet are.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

Logan
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9 posted 2001-07-03 01:42 AM


But in the memories, she still lives on, having left a legacy behind in a friend that loved her enough to remember all those years with tenderness, tears, and smiles...very gentle smile, Sissie
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10 posted 2001-07-03 06:35 AM


This is nice Sunshine...lots of beauty flowing from your memories...James
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11 posted 2001-07-03 08:39 AM


I think this telling to be among the best... A sad tale and one many of us can relate to in some way on some level of having lost a friend....
I know not what else to say... it touched me too deeply...


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12 posted 2001-07-03 08:50 AM


I am crying as I read this again. it is so sad and so beautiful. And I am so sorry for this loss.  
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13 posted 2001-07-03 08:59 AM


Karilea - This poem really touched me.  I guess because I never had a friend so dear when I was younger; and, because there is so much love in every line you wrote.  This is really beautiful.  Lorelei has a "Gloria-friend" (that's a great way of describing their friendship - I think I'll adopt that term if you don't mind), and it makes me sad they can't live closer together.  Especially now.
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14 posted 2001-07-03 09:20 AM


They also serve ... at home ... and die ... wasteful ... not understood ... missed.
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15 posted 2001-07-03 09:22 AM


A very touching peice of writing, thankyou for sharing it with us all, I felt the tears coming as your words told the story.

Be well

Rick

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16 posted 2001-07-03 12:14 PM


Karilea,

I wanted to send this back up so that more people would have the opportunity of reading.  It is not only good work, but a very touching story.  

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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17 posted 2001-07-03 02:17 PM


Oh how sad and lovely a memorial to a special friend.
Sandra

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18 posted 2001-07-03 03:22 PM


Karliea, beautifully written poem. Sigh.

"Like Sand underneath the snow, I make you mine." Kristin Hersh

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19 posted 2001-07-03 05:10 PM


Karilea, this is one of the most touching poems of tribute and love that I have ever read. Very well expressed.
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20 posted 2001-07-03 08:04 PM


Your words breathe life into your memories, and I am touched by them Thank you.

Regards,
Olias.

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21 posted 2001-07-03 08:29 PM


Karilea...This poem touched that place where my best friend from back when lives...I found out she died, after years of looking for her, in the page at the back of my High School reunion book...in memorium.  Big Hugs to you for writing this..it is full of your heart.
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22 posted 2001-07-03 08:41 PM


RSW....thank you for coming in to read...I would only hope that today she would still see me...as I am....

Logan...a B&W is all I have left of her, that, and a few notes in a yearbook...she said I would see the stars...every time I look up, I do...

JamesMichael, thank you for your kind words....

Cpat Hair...that it touched you....that you said so....says much...

Lisa, I'm glad that you are crying, it means you are living....thank you!...

LJA...by now, you have friends such as this, I know, even if you are a kitty-kicker...your Lorelei is a fortunate woman...tell her I said so....

Interloper...yes, you understand his plight...I did, in hindsight, I was full of the now, then....

Rick, indeed, don't ask me to read this aloud, all you will hear are the tears...

Auguste....a humble, and appreciative, thank you...

Cat...she was a beautiful girl, and will always be....21....

Brian, your "sigh" says volumes...thank you...

Denise...I am humbled, indeed...thank you, dear....

OLIAS, this comment means more to me than you shall ever know...thank you...

Martie...thank you for allowing me to splash my heart...

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23 posted 2001-07-06 06:57 PM


and what a wonderful splash it was too!!!!


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24 posted 2001-07-06 10:37 PM


You wrote a very nice memory Sunshine

Titia

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