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Decaflame
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since 2001-05-11
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0 posted 2001-07-02 03:47 PM




Breathing lessons

wounds wound past
me,
a few deep,
a number unseen
several obscene
as
winding wind wrapped
then warped my thoughts
moonlight
pulls
but sunlight
heals
so i shall walk a little
farther to
greet the shore
in daylight,
and allow it to
swallow me
whole
at night

remembering

to breathe


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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2001-07-02 03:51 PM


I see several words that are different...
and the possible is great...
so now..I'll say what I want..( sticking out tongue)

GOOD STUFF!!!!



Lone Wolf
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2 posted 2001-07-02 03:56 PM


Excellent work, Decaflame.  Your true talent shines in this one!  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

brian madden
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3 posted 2001-07-02 03:59 PM


so i shall walk a little
farther to
greet the shore
in daylight,
and allow it to
swallow me
whole
at night

remembering

to breathe


the healing process begins, I really enjoyed this one.

Auguste
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By the sea
4 posted 2001-07-02 05:46 PM


I heal best at night.  Very well done, Deca.

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

Mysteria
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5 posted 2001-07-02 05:52 PM


Now you KNOW I loved this!  And yes, just remember to breathe, and all will be well!

If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job!    ~* Mysteria *~

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Deep in the heart
6 posted 2001-07-02 05:52 PM


gr8 write indeed.  Somber, but good
Martie
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7 posted 2001-07-02 06:43 PM


Decaflame--I love the way you said this hope ...some things just get better if we remember to walk into the sun and breathe.  
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