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Our Hearts Danced
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Our Hearts Danced |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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Once upon a time you were in my heart brilliancy within my soul shadows within candlelight silhouettes upon an easel of a wall wrapped tightly in a candlelight shawl Violins within the music of your voice rainbows between your heart and mine shining into the caverns of my eyes unmasking . . . an unwilling disguise I fell in love and OH! how I fluttered like exotic wings of a butterfly Exotic fans in the wind danced a tango cheek to cheek was the wind and the sky swirling upon a translucent dance floor the skirt in the wind tangoed by translucent as sweet Spanish lime Our hearts danced, Once upon a time Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up. Pablo Picasso [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 07-02-2001).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah.. sounds like a dance to remember indeed... I enjoyed.... nice images and word play... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Ah, one should never miss the dance. Very nice!  All writing comes |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Vic, this is wonderful. "We danced..once upon a time.."What a nostalgic and lonely feel, amidst beautiful images. Sandra |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like this dance Victoria...James |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
lovely, lovely, lovely...I do have one tiny idea to make it just a shade more powerful, only if you're interested it is swaying and conveying of wondrous emotions and the dance |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
your imagery is so amazing, keep it up! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
and lived. . . well, you know the rest. . . wonderful my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Pat..so glad you enjoyed the tango. lone wolf ..thank you for peeking in today thank you sandra..nice to hear from you hugs james...yes i love the tango too  thank youthank you Virginia..next time i will sway instead of swirl and flutter haa ..although i dont think there is too much swirling and swaying in a tango..although my heart was doing the fluttering. I changed the last line to OUR HEARTS DANCED as that is the feeling i was conveying in the poem..instead of We danced. i think that is better..actually i think i will change the title too..to Our hearts danced. Thank you for your considerate comments.. thank you irish rose..always nice to hear from you ..hugs sven..glad you enjoyed my tango... ~Victoria~ [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 07-02-2001).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Again your gorgeous imagery makes me smile, sweet friend, may you forever dance the tango of love with the love of your life! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is sooooooo beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Victoria, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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