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Another Day Of Traveling
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Another Day Of Traveling |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Another day of traveling, Another night alone, The closest that I’ve been to you Is on the telephone. My heart has started sinking, And feels just like a stone, From missing you From some where in my memory, Locked up in my brain, The symphony of what we are, Plays itself again, I let the simple melody, Take away the pain, Of missing you The echo of the notes we wrote, Sing a sweet refrain, As I close my eyes and picture you, Holding me again. Filling up the emptiness That’s driving me insane, From missing you Another day of traveling, Another day alone, The closest that I’ve been to you Is on the telephone, My heart has started aching, And feels just like a stone, From missing you. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Cpat: I can relate to this one.... from what I have read of your poems this evening, I know I could learn much from you.....you write with such beauty and warmth in your heart... a pleasure to read your words. ~Roniece~ |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
It really a wounderful poem....I like it very much.....Thanx for such a rythmic poem |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Amazing what even one's voice over a line of cord, and across the miles, can do to one's heart.... well done, and a verified keeper.... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this....James |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
It's never easy to be away from the one you love. So well said. May you see them soon.  All writing comes |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I have gestated this feeling many-a-time, Ron. Sometimes memory is all we have, want, and need, and sometimes it can be a haunting, clutching wraith of decisions made and paths chosen... Thanks for another well-crafted moment of emotion. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You do have a way with words, Ron. Why not set this to music? |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hey, CP - great flow, and a sentiment shared by a lot of us. Nice form breaks in there, too. |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
I really enjoyed reading this and I think Interloper is right, you need to put this one to music! Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
Cpat...sounds like a great song to me...helen |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Lovely, should be stamped inside every Gideon. Naw maybe on the room service menu then it's sure to be read. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Lisa Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 88Lunenburg,VT USA |
How hauntingly sad...And yet there's hope, for if you've talked on the telephone you should see them again. This one will stay with me for a long time. Very, very good! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Know the feeling well, my friend...neat piece...jwesley |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thanks to everyone for their responses!!! This was written with the idea of it being set to music..something along the lines of the tune "Turn the Page" In any case.. I am not musically inclined nor would you want to hear me try and sing this..( laughing) I do greatly appreciate your taking the time to read and comment!!!! |
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