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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-07-02 10:08 AM

I remember you…
How at 14 we fell
Through the excitement
And pain of being in love.

You, seeming much older
Than I felt I was,
Yet less in pain than I
Thought you were.

Tenderness and budding bodies
Twined together in
Clandestine trysts
Held for furtive moments
The hope of not being
Alone forever.

Who would have known
That some 30 years later,
I still remember the way
Your smile lit my days?

Or that the way you spoke,
When you were lost in the lies
We told each other,
Would haunt still nights?

At 14 I fell…
Out of the grace of innocence
And into love with you.
I no longer love you,
But the memories of
Those days and nights
Can make me wish I did.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2001-07-02 10:12 AM

Cpat: I love this one!! Beautifully penned.....

Roniece

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

2 posted 2001-07-02 10:13 AM

Well...I have to admit that I am now a definite fan! This brings such memories to mind, and the ending is superb!!!!!

The road goes on forever, and the stories never end...

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

3 posted 2001-07-02 10:14 AM

I recall that time...and I like the way you "fell"....

a most descriptive image of what happens when it happens....

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

4 posted 2001-07-02 11:40 AM

Evocative in a "haunting" manner... the space you leave in the brevity of description is exactly the space which fills with the mind's imagery and empathy... I enjoy your unique style of "story-telling" and thought provoking.

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear; few can listen."

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2001-07-02 12:23 PM

Ah, sweet memories ... Let me just close my eyes and recollect right along with you, Ron

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

6 posted 2001-07-02 01:04 PM

this was beautiful! sweet memories
like this are worth cherishing and
holding onto. *smiles*

take care.
amy

"but i see your true colors,
shining through...
i see your true colors
and that's why i love you"
~phil collins~

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2001-07-02 06:33 PM

(softly whispered.......) ...........wow

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

8 posted 2001-07-09 02:31 PM

It is so nice seeing you remember at what was....

well done!

WhiteDragon
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 70
O-town, Fl

9 posted 2001-07-09 03:40 PM

WOW...that's all i can say. I loved this poem...um...*speechless*

God Bless, Jeremy

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2001-07-09 04:28 PM

Cpat--A time I remember that you have brought back
thank you for that!

thecraig
Member

since 2001-03-11

Posts 223

11 posted 2001-07-11 06:51 AM

Diffrent love kinds, Maybe a friendly love now that time & circumstance have swerved passions.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

12 posted 2001-07-11 06:55 AM

Ah! The impression of that first love, forever lingering!....Nice work Cpat!

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