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Alicethruglass
Member

since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

0 posted 2001-07-01 02:37 PM

Between Layers

Almost touching you, I am
between layers of clear.
The shine of once upon a time
is discarded among silver stars
floating in the shadow
on this moonlit night.

Summer's warmth, once holding
all promise of you, tempers the air
with your memory. Tears falling
like stardust, glisten my pillow
as I soak in the thoughts of you.

And between the night's layers,
in dream upon dream, I am shadowed
until morning comes.
Until I gaze into the mirror
to see only the clear once again.

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

1 posted 2001-07-01 02:45 PM

Your images are presented well.

Gloom

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

2 posted 2001-07-01 03:02 PM

Oh how beautifully painful....I've felt like that before. Your imagery is fabulous.
~Krista

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-07-01 03:55 PM

Almost touching you, I am
between layers of clear.
The shine of once upon a time
is discarded among silver stars
floating in the shadow
on this moonlit night.
===================
this is well written with the employ of imagery, metaphor and emotion...
bittersweet and aching
well done Poetess Alice
take care
jm

We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away,
Like the doors of heaven will swing wide open if we just find the right words to say.
~E. McCain

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2001-07-01 05:50 PM

This is extremely touching in all points, I enjoyed the feeling I got from reading this.

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-07-01 05:59 PM

You have captured the metamorphosis well, Alice. Nice write.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Alicethruglass
Member

since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

6 posted 2001-07-01 07:52 PM

Professor
if my love comes through my words, then and only then have I presented my images well. Thank you,
Alice

~Krista
glad you saw the beauty felt through my pain

jm
yes...I would describe this as bittersweet and aching,
thank you
Alice

Irish Rose
hoping the touching was of a good feel then
thank you
Alice

Lone Wolf
Thank you for your kind words
Alice

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

7 posted 2001-07-02 04:27 PM

An emotional tale, thanks for sharing. enjoyed the read.

"Like Sand underneath the snow, I make you mine." Kristin Hersh

Alicethruglass
Member

since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

8 posted 2001-07-03 11:30 AM

Thank you Brian, pleased you enjoyed.

~A~

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