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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-07-01 12:50 PM

One Heavy Chevy
Virginia Salter

One heavy Chevy
with four on the floor
dice o’er the dash
decals on the door.

A super classy chassis
with tuck ‘n’ roll seats
Sweeter on the eyes
than sugar-coated treats.

Thumpin’ out a rhythm
singing ‘bout life,
Cryin’ and a whinin’
‘bout losin’ his wife.

The dog in the back
is bayin’ at the moon
Addin’ morose
to the baleful tune.

Antler rack
pointin’ at the sky,
Rear view mirror
sayin’ “Good-bye.”

Fading now
as tires hit the dust
Away from her,
California or bust!

© June 30, 2001

athena4
Senior Member

since 2000-12-10

Posts 622

1 posted 2001-07-01 01:43 PM

Virginia,
This is wonderful! A country song in the making. Enjoyed very much.
Elise

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

2 posted 2001-07-01 02:19 PM

hehe, this is awesome!

I can just picture that truck riding off towards the horizon with the dog howling in the back. Great poem!
~Krista

"Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you.
And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
~Winnie the Pooh

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2001-07-01 03:04 PM

VAS--I just saw it...a bit dirt crusted but still groovy...Enjoyed this, lady!

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2001-07-02 02:37 AM

VAS-
   yep...definitely got the makin's of
   a hit country song here...LOL
   great job on this!

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2001-07-02 05:40 AM

Ditto, this has the makings of a wonderful country song for sure, it just needs a chorus and presto, you got yourself a hit record as it was sure a hit with me!

If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job! ~* Mysteria *~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-07-02 04:04 PM

Thanks all! Glad you enjoyed, it is a little different for me but very much fun to write, AND to be read.

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