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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2001-07-01 08:47 AM


Rewrite:

Hero’s and Old Gray Mares

My hero’s have turned from the daring dare
To the constant of the old gray mare
From the thrill of a moments glory
To the dull of a stable story

From the burst of light of a novas’ flare
To the ever burning candle there
To the constant of a working back
That has pulled its load and cleared the track.

That has faced the weary and the dreary
And never stopped when things got leery.
That has never flown on butterfly wings
But kept a string on possible things.

I cannot change the rules that are there
But I have forgone the worship of dare
It burns but a while this light of a spark
But the old gray mare burns steady the dark.

I grant you the thrill of the serge of dare
But nothing dares dare like the old gray mare.


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Balladeer
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1 posted 2001-07-01 08:51 AM


Remind me to wear a hat next time I come over!  

Nicely penned, sir Sy  

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2001-07-01 08:53 AM


Balladeer,
OK, see you soon.

Nan
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3 posted 2001-07-01 08:53 AM


Ah - "They ain't like they used ta be.." Are they Sy?.... Nicely done, of course...
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2001-07-01 08:56 AM


Nan,
So glad to hear from you. Missed you sweety.

RSWells
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5 posted 2001-07-01 08:57 AM


Could be an ode to the working class. As a former Pittsburgher that's how I read it. Or a tribute to a less than flashy but faithful wife. Thanks
Sunshine
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6 posted 2001-07-01 09:04 AM


All I know is...the Poets of Passions are out and about this fine Sunday morning, and it's my pleasured treasure to read you all!

Well done, Sy!

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2001-07-01 10:03 AM


RSWells,
Both good points, Thanks

Sunshine,
Thanks for the read.

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8 posted 2001-07-01 12:05 PM


Seymour~
A charming read
your quill of bleed
Quite the tale of heroes steady
off across a meadow fair
the old gray mare stands ready

Gallop of a memory
across a trail or two
'nothing dares dare like the old gray mare'
is certainly going to do !

You shine !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                               noles1@totcon.com             

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2001-07-01 12:23 PM


Marge,
You more than shine, Hugs and kisses and thanks.

Irish Rose
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10 posted 2001-07-01 12:42 PM


what an original write!


Lisa
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11 posted 2001-07-01 02:14 PM


I really liked this.

"The old grey mare
sure and steady
No flash in the pan
alway there, always ready"

who could ask for anything more?

SmittenKitten
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12 posted 2001-07-01 02:28 PM


Well I think that I
need to get me one of these
Great old gray mares
One of these daring steeds!

I love it  
~Krista

Janet Marie
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13 posted 2001-07-01 02:52 PM


That has faced the weary and the dreary
And never stopped when things got leery.
That has never flown on butterfly wings
But kept a string on possible things.


I cannot change the rules that are there
But I have forgone the worship of dare
It burns but a while this light of a spark
But the old gray mare burns steady the dark.


I grant you the thrill of the serge of dare
But nothing dares dare like the old gray mare.
=========================

Yes...keep a tight hold on that string of possible things  

*winkiewinkie*
me

We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away,
Like the doors of heaven will swing wide open if we just find the right words to say.
~E. McCain

Seymour Tabin
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14 posted 2001-07-01 05:40 PM


Irish,
Thank you so much.

Lisa,
Nice poetic comment, thank you.

Smitten,
Thank you for the sweet comment.

JM,
Yes I do hold the strings of possible things.
Winkiewinkie Stinky.

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