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In Passing
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In Passing |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
In passing you along the way Exchange of smiles, the same each day A quick nod then my eyes downcast Afraid to speak of passion's past One night shared in painful embrace You wore jeans, I wore black lace Now you are healed in lover's game While I am left with awful shame When it ended, you scolded me "it just happened! Just let it be!" but I could not forget the way you led me in this game you play Hidden from even my own heart token feeling I cannot start Eyes downcast as you look at me All I see is what cannot be |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh those mistakes are so genuine and we all make them! But as far as scolding you...uh uh that's a no no! Wonderful insightful write...these things happen and it takes two to make them happen.......lovely open hearted write......I'd never scold you I would just hold you....and that's the difference......love this write! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Ouch! This one stings with regret. All writing comes |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh yes, very effective discussion of this scenario. I should borrow it to send to someone, but of course I can't cause I DON"T CARE ANYMORE. Ha Ha Sandra |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine~ Ah ... black lace and jeans ... Stirred a memory or two here, gal ! No shame ... no blame For two shared the flame~ No looking back in a moment's regret Knowing forever ... you'll not forget~ And in some corner of his mind He will also remember the time~ jeans met lace ... in tender embrace~ Isn't it comforting to know that they also have memories ? Yeah ... I think so. Nicely written, poetess. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Forgive -- but don't forget... Give... and don't regret. You've painted a powerful scene of a reality, and I can sense the emotions involved. Can you see the positive in what happened? -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Painful to read sweet poetess taken by one moment and cast aside the next. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Eyes downcast as you look at me All I see is what cannot be is very beauuuuuutiful... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
jeans met lace one time spontaneous combustion no marks left thereby |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Every word of this echoes my heart, PDV... happiness is indeed fleeting, but the ache seems to last forever... and you've written the regrets and wishing otherwise so very well. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Ms DeVine - I really like the jeans/lace thing. But it does leave me wondering - why would any woman want to sleep with a man who wears lace? *puzzled eyes* Yanno? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
LngJhn, I've heard pirates wear lacy shirts!!! and short tight pants..and an EARRING!  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this happens all too often I feel. . . a sad poem. . . well done. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
My goodness, boys in lace you said? Oh no, girls in lace and boys in jeans Does that match, lace and jeans I mean? Love the read. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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