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ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin

0 posted 2001-06-30 06:03 AM


I saw you today
we stopped and we stared,
blankness...
feeling...
No words need we say
our thoughts are still shared,
hopeless...
reeling...

We moved not an inch
all time froze just then,
dragging...
piercing...
Not even a flinch
a knot tied within,
nagging...
searing...

Then out of the dark
a calm settled in,
warming...
soothing...
Our walls fell apart
doors opened within,
pouring...
moving...

We stepped up and met
embraced with a tear,
shaking...
squeezing...
Cast off all regret
subsided our fear,
breaking...
seizing...

Forgiveness and peace
our demons set free,
holding...
crying...
This tender release
full-filling our plea's,
holding...
crying...
...but this time we're smiling.

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.




[This message has been edited by ThUnDeRkYsS (edited 06-30-2001).]

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ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2001-06-30 06:07 AM


I know what you mean it seems like a total seizure at first....but how long can that last.   I love that last line it makes the whole poem!    Great write!
MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...
2 posted 2001-06-30 09:30 AM


Forgivness is such a necessary, though at times, almost insurmountable, thing...  This was a gripping portrayal with emotions ready-felt.  Forgive, I say, but never forget...  just learn and move on.  Powerful write.

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear;  few can listen."

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
3 posted 2001-06-30 09:34 AM


Oh, I love this one.  Great expression of your emotions and images of the scene.  Great job, sweetie!  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Jessica
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Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350
South AL
4 posted 2001-06-30 01:50 PM


Great work!!  

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
5 posted 2001-06-30 02:36 PM


ethome... Yes, unbelievable how difficult it is when you run into someone with whom you've been through so many things but ended up going your own ways in the end.  Thank you

MARK V SHELDON... Such truth Mark, glad you liked it.  Thank you

Lone Wolf... I've felt them enough to know just how they feel all the time LOL    Thank you babe  

Jessica... Thank you  

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.



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