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Love on the rocks
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Love on the rocks |
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Hollowman Member
since 2001-06-01
Posts 117 |
The scapel has been weilded my heart now lies in two The surgical destruction of the love I give to you Cutting into me with silence no regrets for all the pain Just grab another handful of my heart and dont accept the blame Equal in your harsh words Your hard charade will die For all the bitterness you hold Is enough to make men cry The door was opened for a while and now it is firmly shut The loving feeling you supplied was a stabbing in the gut Air and dust my makeup my heart now turned to stone A lesson learnt of cruel love Its you that stands alone So cast away forever this love that once was true and know in your slumber darling part of the problem was you Rich nb.How can you quantify love? |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow....this stings to read.....and it's so sad....but...wow...great writing  |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Wow... overflowing with emotion and feeling... Felt every line. Good luck my friend Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The bitterness is seeping out through the lines and filling the pain with anger along with sorrow.....amazing how this kind of hurt can produce such intense poetry! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
heartfelt write.....straith from your heart. loved reading it. Charisma |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hollowman~ 'Bartender, pour the house another round.'  An effective pouring from the heart. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
The hurt you display is so full of sorrow that it hurts one to read it. But that is not a bad thing just a sign of a wonderfully written poem. ~*Freedom Is Not Free*~ (Korean War Memorial) |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Very beautiful with full rythem and weight............very nice |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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