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Martie
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0 posted 2001-06-28 10:35 AM


(a repost for the June bloom)

Under the Mimosa Tree

She swept into summer
with her youth
and her freckled sunlit arms
and she smiled
oh how she smiled

sliding was how it seemed
with long legs
and her slender dear waist
unaware of the shine
so displayed in her laugh

She didn’t care
that the grass was damp
and the air sizzled heat
her shoes lay limp
and her toes wiggled the air

To look up as she lay
was her delight
her elbows projected from her head
like pointed wings
as she saw her dreams dare

Love was an ever thing then
in the days of frills and sequins
she saw white lace and a plump baby
and was so tickled just to be
bare legged on the grass waiting

This tree is so soft she thought
her lashes feathering her view
‘til melding flowed the sky to peach
and her heart mellowed
and then fell soft feathers
around her head

She thought there would never be
another magic so fragrant
and she tried to capture its blooming
to press it for time

but the air grew chill
and the sky darkened
and her damp skirt clung to her
and her flowing was diminished
for lasting she learned
is only a minute
under the mimosa tree.

© Copyright 2001 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-28 10:36 AM


Ah Martie....warm hugs.....I needed a Kleenex warning with this....

I had forgotten that it was going to tug me at the end....

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2 posted 2001-06-28 10:50 AM


Fleeting moment indeed.  Well done  
Nate Dogg
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3 posted 2001-06-28 11:31 AM


A very nice story!

Nathan

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4 posted 2001-06-28 11:46 AM


                "She thought there would never be
                 another magic so fragrant
                 and she tried to capture its blooming
                 to press it for time

                 but the air grew chill
                 and the sky darkened
                 and her damp skirt clung to her
                 and her flowing was diminished
                 for lasting she learned
                 is only a minute
                 under the mimosa tree."

You are a true poet and this is wonderful writing!

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5 posted 2001-06-28 12:23 PM


SweetSister~
Ohhhhhhhhh .... I'm glad it's June !
The bloom of your heart is in full regalia !
*Hugs*

Must be allergens that have my eyes all teary~
Beautiful, sweetie !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~

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6 posted 2001-06-28 12:27 PM


my favorite tree since I was a child...
one of my favorite poems by you...
this one left a poetic footprint on my heart a long time.

We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away,
Like the doors of heaven will swing wide open if we just find the right words to say.
~E. McCain

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7 posted 2001-06-28 12:51 PM


ah so many things are but fleeting moments... which should help us with time to learn to savor them for what they are, remember them, and take with us always the memories...

I enjoyed this a great deal.. glad you reposted.

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8 posted 2001-06-28 04:48 PM


This one grabs me on many levels, Martie... I've loved mimosas since childhood... not only are they incredibly beautiful, they're easy to climb. *G* And now, my little nephew calls them "tickle trees" cause an aunt (who shall remain nameless to protect the guilty *G*) tickles his chin with the blossoms. *S*

But your poem also reminds us to appreciate what we have when we've got it... for all too soon, we may be left with nothing. Wonderful work, Martie!

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9 posted 2001-06-28 07:43 PM


~Martie,...once again I am thankful for reading your words. This piece is truly something else. I could see so many things throughout, and feel even more. "‘til melding flowed the sky to peach",...I can't get that gorgeous line out of my head. You are such a wonderful, wonderful poet, I always look forward to your posts. *Peace you.

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10 posted 2001-06-28 08:13 PM


Martie,
Beautiful

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

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11 posted 2001-06-28 09:36 PM


As usual, it's marvellous...

thanks for the read my poetic counterpart...

K

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on unlikely land with every step.


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12 posted 2001-06-29 03:13 AM


Yanno, this is one of my favorites and go into the tomb every so often to read, and you just saved me a trip, oh but do I love this one, thanks for the re-post Martie.

"Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself."
~ Hopi ~

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13 posted 2001-06-29 06:34 AM


This is a delichtful piece and delightful moments you capture in the grace of your writing
Liz

Kit McCallum
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14 posted 2001-06-29 06:37 AM


Oh Martie ... this is so exquisite. The imagery and descriptive qualities you've captured have me right there under the tree in contemplative throught myself. I simply adore this ... it's exceptional writing.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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15 posted 2001-06-29 10:13 AM



Martie ~ This is wonderful writing, there's such heart and perfect imagery in this, it's a keeper, indeed  

Take care,
Melissa~

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16 posted 2001-06-29 10:52 AM


you are a master of language and the sensual

I felt the grass, I saw the tree and the sky

I did not want the moment to end

Lovely!

Martie
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17 posted 2001-06-29 10:56 AM


Thank you all for your heart warming replies...I have a mimosa tree in the yard...and the one in the neighbor's yard is mostly mine too.  They are so beautiful this time of year...I hope you have the opportunity to be under one yourself.  Hugs!!
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18 posted 2001-06-29 09:26 PM


This is very nice, Martie.  

Michael

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There is more depth to the heart than the human mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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