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Decaflame
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0 posted 2001-06-27 02:39 PM


advancement

of soul

striding

to stand within
and come up

to your space, then

encapsulated
by your address

surveying your chest
rise

fall

perceiving this self’s soul
in your
judgment

grasping the
eventuality of sooner

so, I, in

stepping up

to the

kiss

found then

my

shy


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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2001-06-27 02:43 PM


Decaflame,
Why not. Enjoyed

Decaflame
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2 posted 2001-06-27 02:49 PM


Sy, why not, indeed!  So very glad this caught your eye....thank you my sweet poet...
Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2001-06-27 02:53 PM


Inside
each
sighfully
resigned
moment
wondering
why


Loved you poem... as usual it made me think and re-read for the nuances and things not shouted... but left to lie like smoke on a still evening...


ethome
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4 posted 2001-06-27 03:25 PM


Another great write!  Why not?
Sven
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5 posted 2001-06-27 07:06 PM


and after that??  

wonderful my friend. . . you have such a way of looking at the world. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Mysteria
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6 posted 2001-06-27 10:43 PM


Nicely done!

"Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself."
~ Hopi ~

Nate Dogg
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Georgia, Fulton
7 posted 2001-06-27 11:45 PM


I like the way this flowed....a good write!!

Nathan

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2001-06-27 11:55 PM


encapsulated
by your address

surveying your chest
rise

fall

perceiving this self’s soul
in your
judgment

grasping the
eventuality of sooner

so, I, in

stepping up

to the

kiss

found then

my

shy
=========================

OH i do so love the imagery in this one...  
very nice poetess Deca!!

I'm going crazy, I'm losing sleep.
I'm in too far, I'm in way too deep over you.
You'll always be the one.
You were the first, you'll be the last.

Decaflame
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9 posted 2001-06-28 10:22 AM


Captain...your comments are certainly a poem unto themselves, thank you...

Ethome...why not indeed?....thank you...

Sven!  After that....who knows?

Thank you Mysteria....

Nate, I liked it too...thank you!....

JanetMarie, the imagery was just for you....Thank you....

ThUnDeRkYsS
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10 posted 2001-06-29 12:26 PM


Never know till you try    Might as well!  If nothing else it'll be a rush!! lol  And I love those    Nice job

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.



Logan
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11 posted 2001-06-29 02:49 AM


The soul does bring us to interesting developments, does it not?..Very interesting write there, Decaflame...very gentle smile
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Deep in the heart
12 posted 2001-06-30 01:49 PM


when shy found again
both souls have become enriched
it looks good on them

Decaflame
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13 posted 2001-07-02 09:44 AM


ThUnDeRkYsS....thank you so much for coming in to read...

Logan, yes, Sir, the soul does wonderful and then some amazing things...if we listen...

Interloper:

in smiles wonderment
never ceasing to delight
advancement's encroach

lunatic
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14 posted 2001-07-03 09:18 PM


This is much too good not to be at the top

Let thy moon arise.  William Blake

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