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Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2001-06-26 11:26 PM

Along the streets of yesterday
I find a place and wend my way
alleys deep with trash are strewn
streets asleep though tis just noon

Lonely junkyard mongrel yelps
I pull the chain but nothing helps
his life is not mine to free
as I can only fend for me

Finding life to much to bear
nothing here is really there
nothing there is here for me
I sing the song of being free

Waiting on the edge of tears
fighting back my many fears
a wisp of what I used to be
that time when you first loved me

SEA

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with you

1 posted 2001-06-26 11:42 PM

"Waiting on the edge of tears
fighting back my many fears
a wisp of what I used to be
that time when you first loved me"
I remember how this feels......this is so sad....and written so well!

JLR
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2 posted 2001-06-27 12:15 PM

a wisp of what I used to be
that time when you first loved me

Seems we were walking parellel streets today...nice to know I wasn't completely alone.

Fancy
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since 2001-06-05

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3 posted 2001-06-27 02:11 AM

..."a wisp of what I use to be"...
what conflicting thoughts
for me...
loved this line.

"...don't ever stop loving, don't ever stop believing, don't ever stop dreaming your dreams..."
Warmly...
Fancy

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Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-06-27 09:04 AM

Sadly 1derful...

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2001-06-27 09:11 AM

DeVine One,
There is more then one way to be loved. *L*

Poet deVine

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6 posted 2001-06-27 09:26 AM

Thank you all!!!

and Sy, I hope there is.....

Sven

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7 posted 2001-06-27 07:25 PM

there is. . . and you know it. . .

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

esclandre
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since 2001-06-11

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8 posted 2001-06-28 03:20 AM

been there, done that... have the t-shirt...

*sigh*

weird how sometimes we forget that others have felt the same things... nice.

Esclandre

ethome
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9 posted 2001-06-28 05:28 AM

PDV I love how you start this...

"Along the streets of yesterday"

I love the melancoholy thoughts in between. Then you end it like this...

"that time when you first loved me"

Very enjoyable writing!

Kit McCallum

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10 posted 2001-06-28 07:08 AM

"Finding life to much to bear
nothing here is really there
nothing there is here for me
I sing the song of being free"

Oh Sharon ... wonderful flow and phrasing, and so much to ponder within ... I really enjoyed your thoughts in this!

Best wishes,
/Kit

MyEnchanted_Melody
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

11 posted 2001-06-28 11:18 AM

Waiting on the edge of tears
fighting back my many fears
a wisp of what I used to be
...........
============================

These lines and the whole poem seems to go along my mood today........You have really expressed it so well.

Thank you for a touching read....
*********************

It's only me.......only me
I hope that would suffice eternally

{{to cross a sea of wonder, and hold close at heart all dreams}}

suthern

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12 posted 2001-06-28 04:38 PM

Vivid images leading to a last verse I understand entirely too well... this is excellent, PDV!

And still the hope - some time, somewhere
Will be someone who'll truly care.

vandana

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13 posted 2001-06-28 05:34 PM

nice work

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

14 posted 2001-06-28 09:42 PM

Sharon, the title really pulled me in. What a way to say it..This whole poem says sad, with memories that still hurt. Holding hands here, I'm right there with you. Excellent emotional write.
Sandra

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

15 posted 2001-06-28 09:48 PM

Thank you all for you kindness...I DO appreciate you all..

Suetang
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16 posted 2001-06-28 10:57 PM

This was so hauntingly sad but so well written. Take care......Sue

Suetang

Jessica

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17 posted 2001-06-28 11:04 PM

PDV,
I absolutely loved this poem. I know where you are coming from. Thanks for writting such a beautiful and expressing poem. I don't think I would change a single line...

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