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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-06-26 12:25 PM



And in the center circle

I embraced, naked thoughts

With bare breast against

Bare chest

Till the beating

And breathing

Were in one

Then as I slowly

Slipped into them

A rhythm began

Which drew me

Deeper

And rocked me

Gently

Swaying to

A music felt

And never heard

Wrapping

Around me the edges…

Of curved time

I slept

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1 posted 2001-06-26 12:42 PM


Oh, my, this is wonderfully serene, I think I'll go take a nap.  First, though, I shall make a plea, since you are in this vein...would you read my "Finding Us"
and help me.

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2 posted 2001-06-26 12:49 PM


And in complete peace, I would imagine.  Enjoyed this a lot!
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3 posted 2001-06-26 06:36 PM


while time stopped. . .

an excellent telling of the ritual. . . well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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4 posted 2001-06-26 08:10 PM


This is so beautiful, Ron, softly sensual and so appealing...

enjoyed reading this!

~Tier

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5 posted 2001-06-27 08:55 AM


Well goodness....spirits certainly dance in this poetic beauty....
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6 posted 2001-06-27 08:57 AM


Bravo, you rascal  
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7 posted 2001-06-27 09:35 AM


Thank to all... but I think I had best clear up a couple of things...

While the images in the poem are sensual, they were not intended to be sexual..the poem was written with the thoughts of communing with a spiritual place... that feeling one gets when being in a special place and feeling closer to understanding...closer to actually being one with all...

Thanks again to everyone for their comments!!
they are always appreciated..I think perhaps I need to re-write this to better convey the idea intended...


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