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1slick_lady
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0 posted 2001-06-24 04:02 PM



Not Your Need

you kept more of you from me
and that I just don’t understand
the art of love is in sharing
that is who I am
I held on through the darkness
without a single ray of light
you stood on the other side of the door
never once did you open it to invite
mistakes have been made on the way
and I will take my share
but under all this weight
some are way too much to bear
I loved you
but couldn’t love you enough
realizing it in my heart and head
is now just a bit rough
I gave you all I am
I’m weary, broken, and I concede
I see that I am not enough
I am not who you need

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet)       Shakespeare


© Copyright 2001 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-24 04:06 PM


Sometimes thing just don't work out.
It's difficult to accept,
But the facts never change for lack of understanding.
The poem was very easy to accept
Flowing nicely.

Gloom

Sunshine
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2 posted 2001-06-24 04:16 PM


This poem accepts the fact that blame needs to be shared...

that lives can go on....

well done, Lady....

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3 posted 2001-06-24 10:45 PM


OneSlickLady~
Very sad emote.
Time of recognition-acceptance-forgiveness-and moving beyond.
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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Lone Wolf
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4 posted 2001-06-24 10:52 PM


Oh what a tough position to be in.  Hard decision to make, Helen.  Best of luck.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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5 posted 2001-06-24 11:04 PM


You mean i am not enough for u.

Amen
  
A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

[This message has been edited by bslicker (edited 06-25-2001).]

Fancy
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6 posted 2001-06-25 12:09 PM


...these are easily recognized emotions shared here...

"...don't ever stop loving, don't ever stop believing, don't ever stop dreaming your dreams..."
Warmly...
Fancy

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7 posted 2001-06-25 07:05 AM


"I gave you all I am
I’m weary, broken, and I concede
I see that I am not enough
I am not who you need"


Such sad lines, you did a wonderful job of making the reader feel the pain and how hopeless it is to love and lose.

illusion
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8 posted 2001-06-25 12:26 PM


Such a sad poem. The ending concession is a heartbreaking realization many of us have had to face - and it's never easy. Great poem.
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9 posted 2001-06-25 01:08 PM


It's only ourselves we can love enough...and how the healing begins.  Well done.
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Deep in the heart
10 posted 2001-06-25 01:44 PM


Sad enlightenment.
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11 posted 2001-06-25 07:01 PM


it's sad when you have to come to that realization. . .but. . . it's something that is sometimes the only way. . .

I can feel the loss. . . and the hurt. . .

excellent writing. . .

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ThUnDeRkYsS
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12 posted 2001-06-29 12:37 PM


I feel the pain in this, this always hurts the most.  Beautifully sad.

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