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Caring Eyes (rewrite) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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“CARING EYES” by Bill Charles ~~~~ If I’m not the person you believe I am, but you discovered I were sincere, would you still look at me through your gentle eyes, with caring… If my whispered words to you are true, but you thought them not, would you still look at me through your gentle eyes, with caring… If I kissed your precious soft lips, and you felt the tenderness, would you still look at me through your gentle eyes, with caring… If I give to you my loving soul, and fragile heart, would you still look at me through your gentle eyes, with caring, If I were to look only at you, and speak softly into your ear, my loving words would be of sweetness with my caring, when I surrender, only to you… ~~~~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What every one should hear, when it comes from the right one.... well done, Sir! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Once more, I enjoyed your minimalistic style and the "turnaround" of the last stanza in terms of word order/arrangement and meaning shuffling. Nice style. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ahh. . . so good to read you again Sir. . . you know that I like this one. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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