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The Mentor
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The Mentor |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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The Mentor he ambled the beach longside me those slow agos in our yestermemories like Harvey he was to me just a voice of the gull a crisp in the wind sliver of fog’s breath as the sun boiled down into the sea loganberry red he was always there while my bare feet clung to the damp sand, elevating my step one grain higher to the heavens it must have been he, you see, who left his mentoring quest in my breast for having heard in the gull’s cry, “you are not yet old enough to know let it grow, let it grow” so I aged my words, allowing decades to elapse before casting delicacies on the wind for the gulls to catch on the fly if nothing else I feed the birds |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I think I've just discovered a poet's heart. This is fabulous, Karilea. May I keep it? Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
This was just awesome!Pure bliss to read!I loved it! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Knowing I'd like it ... there is no doubt. Mentoring in step with my musing spirit, you are ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
'it must have been he, you see, who left his mentoring quest in my breast' Well, Sis, he sure did do a good job of it then. You feed the birds well indeed...very gentle smile |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karilea- very beautiful...  i enjoyed this one a lot... hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I must be your shadow....... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Love this, it reminds me of a Rod McKuen poem. Sandra |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
... and the birds soar to new heights... |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"he was always there while my bare feet clung to the damp sand, elevating my step one grain higher to the heavens" -- I loved that verse, sunshine. What thoughtful, meaningful poetry. Beautiful work.  *Krista Knutson* |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I aged my words...if nothing else...I fed the birds. You learned well! |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
This is so beautiful!! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Alwye actually picked the stanza I adored, and of course you know I LOVE this one for sure. Now if I can figure where my library is, your poem is now in it! Lovely Karilea. ~*~ Tell someone you love them today, as tomorrow may never come ~*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Karilea ... I enjoyed this tremendously! What wonderful phrasing ... I started to copy favorite lines, and gave up as they all intertwine to make the whole of this wonderful piece. Loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Auguste...I hope so...that I have a heart, and you found a keeper...thank you!... sodpossum, bliss is a pretty good word around here...thank you... Marge...how do you find so many ways to say "wow"...? and always leaving smiles... thank you... Logan, it's been a long time since someone has called me "Sis"...and I am enjoying it, and having you come in to read...thank you!... Vicky, that you enjoyed, is all I ask...the comments left behind are pure cream on berries... SEA...absolutely! Wouldn't have it any other way!... Cat...now that, my dear, is one of the best compliments ever!... Nan...being graced by one of your comments is the only way to go...thank you!... Krista, that was one of my favorite parts as well...thanks for coming in to read, I know the schedule's been rough!... JLR, and I'm not through learning...thank you... Thank you Betty!... Mysteria, your "library" is directly below the reply box in Options, two boxes down...see where it says [when you go to reply] Options? "Add Thread to Library"...then, in the dark blue boxes that are at the head of everyone's screen, up there, where it says "Private Library"...click on that and you will see them as you go about, collecting your favorites! Great feature, this!...and thank you my dear, for reading... Kit...someday, I want to write like you! Until then, I'll pen along to the best of my ability...thank you! Karilea |
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