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ThUnDeRkYsS
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Wisconsin

0 posted 2001-06-23 04:21 AM


This is about the silly coincidence of having had Love, losing it, wanting it again and then getting it but not being ready to accept it because your too damn scared of losing it again and in the process hurting someone who is probably trying to overcome the same problem. Where did this vicious circle start and when will we learn how to stop it? (laughing at my cluelessness   )

Empty
Lonely
set me free
Wanting
Needing
Let me be

Pushing
Shoving
Cant come near
Asking
Searching
Wiped a tear

Loving
Hating
Show me how
Hurting
Crying
Leave me now

I had
I lost
I want again
I try
I fail
You cant get in

You come
I push
I hurt you too
I asked
You gave
What did I do?


Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.


[This message has been edited by ThUnDeRkYsS (edited 06-23-2001).]

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Fancy
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since 2001-06-05
Posts 189
TN/USA
1 posted 2001-06-23 04:26 AM


...oh that I were wise enough to answer your age-old question of how to stop 'this'...I recognize this so well, but just on the other side...not a pretty place to be...
thanks for sharing...

"...don't ever stop loving, don't ever stop believing, don't ever stop dreaming your dreams..."
Warmly...
Fancy

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
2 posted 2001-06-23 06:59 AM


It seems like sometimes we want it so much
for so long that we forget how to accept it
and take care of it when it comes...great
writing with an easy flow...I really liked
the way you wrote this...just sorry you had to expierence it to write it~

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
3 posted 2001-06-23 07:08 AM


hey there...isn't it any better  yet?....I was hoping you were happy by now  ((hugss)) *good poem

~Wynter/Maureen

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



MARK V SHELDON
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since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...
4 posted 2001-06-23 09:09 AM


I commend your insights.  You have said much here with very little -- very admirable.  I relate to your signature too.

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear;  few can listen."

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
5 posted 2001-06-23 09:36 AM


I think having this knowledge is the first step in ending the cycle. Very nicely done.
Sandra

Zinsser
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since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641
Calif.
6 posted 2001-06-23 11:26 AM


Very very Good

Thanks
Connie

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
7 posted 2001-06-23 01:07 PM


absolutely wonderfully written! and what you said in your intro is very true... it happens all the time... why??? well, that's one of the mysteries of Life....

...i often call it "God's Little Joke"... lol  

but that's when i'm being a realist which i try to make sure is not too often.... i'd rather believe in the fantasy that  True Love can happen and can last forever, without this cyclical nonsense, but instead with both parties elated and wanting the other passionately and incessantly... teehee... what a dreamer i am, huh? lust forever!! that's the goal.... rofl!  

again, great write!  

ThUnDeRkYsS
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
8 posted 2001-06-23 08:21 PM


Thank you all so much for your kind replies and words of encouragement      Maureen, I am better... this is just a "still true" topic of mine, not really a pressing issue for me right now, just something to right about  

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.



Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
9 posted 2001-06-23 10:31 PM


Hey you!!!  Where the heck have you been?  Missed ya lots sweetie.  We'll catch up soon.  

Wow, though poem here.  I can so relate to this.  It never gets any easier, does it?

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

ThUnDeRkYsS
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
10 posted 2001-06-24 11:27 PM


No sweetie, never really does    I'll find you soon {{{{{{{HUGZ}}}}}}}}

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.



Kit McCallum
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11 posted 2001-06-29 07:05 AM


Excellent cadence and flow Thunderkyss! Oh how I do love to ponder, and you've done this beautifully. I really enjoyed your sentiments and the rhythmic nature of this piece!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
12 posted 2001-06-29 07:09 AM


This is a great poem!
However, that introduction sent me in a circle. I'm glad you wrote it!

Cpat Hair
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13 posted 2001-06-29 08:59 AM


ENJOYED!! Very nicely done...
ThUnDeRkYsS
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Posts 727
Wisconsin
14 posted 2001-06-29 05:59 PM


Thank you all so much for taking a moment to read  

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.



Lone Wolf
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Lansing, MI USA
15 posted 2001-06-29 07:19 PM


Still looking for you!  I know we'll catch up sooner or later.  LOL.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Jessica
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Posts 350
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16 posted 2001-06-29 07:26 PM


I can very well relate to your need for "topics"... I do the same a lot myself; writting about things that happened a while back. It tends to make people think you are down all the time when you're not... I am babbling now, I know... LoL. Thanks for such a beautiful poem. You wrote it very well... *hugs*  

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

SEA
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with you
17 posted 2001-06-29 07:56 PM


I liked this very much...I say end the cycle by just accepting the love given as just that.....love given  
ThUnDeRkYsS
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
18 posted 2001-06-30 02:43 PM


Lone Wolf... Yes, one of these days we will get lucky LOL  

Jessica... That is true, sometimes you have to specify somewhere that you are not hurting now, just writing about the past    Thank  you.

SEA...  Thank you dear, wish it were easier done than said instead of the other way around    Trying though, every day all we can do is try.  Thanks again  

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.



Passions Voice
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since 2000-10-23
Posts 291
Michigan
19 posted 2001-07-03 07:22 PM


It would seem that you opened yourself up completely, which anyone in love would do.

Many heartfelt feelings here.  I loved it.

passion is life. . . ~Diana


Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
20 posted 2001-07-03 09:57 PM


Thunderkyss,

this was sad yet very beautiful.
true sentiments and interesting
question you raise here. i don't have
the answer either...not sure if anyone
does, but i agree with SEA...accept
the love that is given...or like you say
at least TRY   Take care, great write!!

Amy  

"but i see your true colors,
shining through...
i see your true colors
and that's why i love you"
~phil collins~

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