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Nathaniel Shain
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since 2001-06-03
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0 posted 2001-06-22 05:21 PM


She Raises Skirts

With pretty words she raises skirts
and flirts, a risk she’s taking.
Her name is, Jan, she has a man.
A fool of him is making.

Her body moves seductively.
It is meant to make men stare.
Their bodies used, then thrown away.
For their hearts, she doesn’t care.


~Nathaniel Shain~



© Copyright 2001 Nathaniel Shain - All Rights Reserved
Decaflame
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1 posted 2001-06-22 05:26 PM


An adult nursery rhyme.  That, sir, is a compliment.  Well done!
MARK V SHELDON
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since 2001-06-21
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In a corporeal internship...
2 posted 2001-06-22 05:46 PM


Cynical, observant, poignant...  Tight form and well crafted.  I hope this isn't regarding a bitter personal experience...?

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear;  few can listen."

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07
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3 posted 2001-06-22 05:54 PM


Well, you just have to look the other way than. (LOL)

I like the way it's written, good job here.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace&naventryid=100

rosepetals25
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4 posted 2001-06-22 05:57 PM


Nathaniel,

    Welcome to Passions I hope you like it here.. with that said.. I liked the poem.. it looks like you have first hand experience with dealing with women like this. I'm sorry for that.. but it made a very good poem.

TaraB

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2001-06-22 06:30 PM


Enjoyed reading this..James
elizabeth anne
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6 posted 2001-06-22 06:50 PM


Well done! Shows that there is this kind of person in both the sexes!

Elizabeth Anne

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7 posted 2001-06-23 08:08 PM


Ahh.. I can see the mischief, and I can also see something else in this I cannot explain. Love it.
Dee
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since 2000-08-19
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8 posted 2001-06-24 05:22 AM


Nathaniel, an interesting piece. Well written and gets an important point across. Well done.
Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Nathaniel Shain
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since 2001-06-03
Posts 35

9 posted 2001-06-24 02:18 PM


Decaflame,
Thank you for the compliment and for taking the time to read.

Mark,
Very kind words, sir, and much appreciated.  Yes, the experience is real but I was not the recipient.

Titia,
Fortunately for me, I am wise enough to look the other way.  Thank you for coming by and for the nice comments.

rosepetals,
Thank you for the welcome and for reading my poem.  I believe I''m going to like it here.

JamesMichael,
Thanks.

Elizabeth,
Yes, it does.  Thanks.

Temptress,
Yes, "mischief" is a very good word.  Thanks.

Dee,
Thank you.  It's a shame that some women not only continue to set this trap, but that men still foolishly step into it.


Thanks,
Nathaniel


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