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The Killer...Who You Want is Dead
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The Killer...Who You Want is Dead |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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The killer stalks the darkened night My love is somewhere out of sight It’s not the time for me to show For all the hurt would only grow Unless the killer proves its trade We would run from all weave made The street is spectral, doors are locked Fears are armed and words are cocked The killer bends and runs its glove Through the sand of time and love The wind is still for all is calm Drifters silent in call for alms The killer wears a stunning mask A turned up snarl for every task Could it be its on the hunt For something that it doesn’t want Driven by a need it knows Only as a hurt that grows Every door is chained and creaks As they open, ruddy cheeks Whisper, “Who you want is dead, The killer and the groom you wed” Roaming on the streets of dreams Wakened by a widows screams In and out, that is our love Sand that falls from leather glove In deepened sleep the killer stalks Of plans and dreams and idle talk Beggars ask for chooser’s rights The killer stalks the darkened night The doors are gray yet opportune Each one will open for me soon It’s not the time for me to show For all the hurt would only grow “Goodnight my love,” the killer sighs And that was last I closed my eyes. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Stunning, Walt.  I never know what to say beyond my simple awe over your work.  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
walt- wow...this is awesome!! i'm loving this! "Whisper, “Who you want is dead, The killer and the groom you wed” Roaming on the streets of dreams Wakened by a widows screams" powerful stuff!! "Beggars ask for chooser’s rights" i really like that line! this whole thing is great, walt! thanks for sharing it! ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 06-22-2001).] |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
how magnetic. "We would run from all weave made" is quite cleaver. "Fears are armed and words are cocked" sounds so dangerous! "As they open, ruddy cheeks Whisper, “Who you want is dead, The killer and the groom you wed” Roaming on the streets of dreams Wakened by a widows screams." Maan, I wanna quote everything!! This is like a short movie or something and I like the format youve chosen. To me it seems that the groom and the love between the bride and groom are dead. So is the killer love or the widow. Clue me. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Brilliant writing, sir! Nathan |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
Whodunnitwalt? A dark story of love. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey this is great Walty, a wonderful read. Thank you. Maree |
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