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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-06-21 01:30 AM

I understand
I am not fair
all the things I beg of you
not withstand
a tide's despair
awash the sand--the grains of truth.

Remains--a seashell
on the shore
the gift I find, in stead of you.
Just a bell
of echo's roar
resounding
in the absolute.

Awakening
I laugh again-
I did not think it could be done.
Breaking eggs
in a shell's mend--
to think I was the only one.

[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 06-21-2001).]

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

1 posted 2001-06-21 02:08 AM

Hon I especially loved the last stanza

many hugs Sista!

Maree

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-06-21 06:23 AM

Me too, that last stanza really did it for me!

"This rose has seen red, I have been blue
I'm going to Ireland in 2002!" Kathleen.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-06-21 07:01 AM

I understand
I am not fair
all the things I beg of you
not withstand
a tide's despair
awash the sand--the grains of truth.
============================

breaking eggs...breaking hearts....
so many mirrors..............
*sigh*

I'm going crazy, I'm losing sleep.
I'm in too far, I'm in way too deep over you.
You'll always be the one.
You were the first, you'll be the last.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

4 posted 2001-06-21 07:05 AM

"resounding
in the absolute."

Powerful line. I think we've all broken a few eggs you know?

Great poem, K.

Michael

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

5 posted 2001-06-21 07:31 AM

I tip toe through your fragile words, whose painful message's softly heard. In leaving only footprinted sand's the proof of hope and you still stand.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2001-06-21 07:42 AM

Very nice... good word play and flow, but I agree the last stanza id the strength..

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

7 posted 2001-06-21 02:23 PM

can't make an omelette with out breaking some eggs. enjoyed the read.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

8 posted 2001-06-21 02:26 PM

The ayes have it. Well done, esp the last stanza.

Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

Posts 1231
Near golden sunsets

9 posted 2001-06-22 02:01 AM

Heya K, what's cookin in Orleans?

Just thought I'd drop in and let you know I'm alive mostly. *grins*

Loved yer writtining, very insightful it twas!

-me

You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

10 posted 2001-06-22 08:04 AM

Remarkable...

Regards O Serene One,
Sudhir

"I was born intelligent - education ruined me"

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

11 posted 2001-06-22 01:06 PM

Popped in for a quick thank you--will be back as soon as I am able. I love you all much..you've my gratitude.

AND HEY PHIL---e me sometime, will ya?

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