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JLR
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since 2001-02-04
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0 posted 2001-06-21 01:23 AM


Get a Life…Hers is Taken


You have the combination
so does she
may as well be symbolic
hers doesn’t work
for yours, the master

resets the code each time
she finds the strength
forms a plan
eases her way beyond your grasp

don’t you have something better to do
like getting your own life

You blame it on outside interference
must be someone feeding her these thoughts
waiting in the shadows
to snatch from you her love

news flash
you need no help in driving her away
your agenda’s been long defined

all she asks, all she seeks
is her own life
simply released
back to her



[This message has been edited by JLR (edited 06-21-2001).]

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Fancy
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since 2001-06-05
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1 posted 2001-06-21 01:29 AM


..."news flash"...
I love it!!!  How appropriately placed!

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
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2 posted 2001-06-21 06:22 AM


straightforward and honest message here...

"This rose has seen red, I have been blue
I'm going to Ireland in 2002!" Kathleen.

Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2001-06-21 07:51 AM


To the point and eloquent in its conveyance of thought... loved the last stanza..
Zinsser
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since 2001-02-27
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Calif.
4 posted 2001-06-21 09:53 AM


Very Good
The Flow...
The feeling of being trapped
The other not understanding
How much energy it takes
to once again make a plan
Very Good!
Thanks
Connie

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
5 posted 2001-06-21 10:04 AM


Excellent.

Tiersdin
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east coast
6 posted 2001-06-21 11:31 AM


Ditto all the above!

*hugs & smiles*

~Tier

walker
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7 posted 2001-06-21 01:18 PM


Very well said, I like it, I like it!
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